Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether the educational system must play a role in determining one’s future educational choices. Indisputably, educational institutions can understand and observe the student up closely. Nevertheless, these institutions should not putt off student’s desires and motivation to pursue a particular field of study. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that the responsibility of dissuading students from achieving their educational goals, should be within the educational institutions, and would argue that the educational system should not intervene in their students’ choices.
First, peoples’ personalities, traits, behavior and intelligence are changeable and always dynamic as they grow and in reactance to environmental demands and needs. For example, we would not expect the same reactions and way of thinking from a 13 years old adolescent to be similar to his or her reactions when he/she was in first grade. Similarly, the case with intelligence, research in validating different intelligence and IQ tests has shown that as they age, people get smarter, their common knowledge is broader and their attention gets better. For that reason, schools and universities should believe in their students’ process and help them fulfill their full potentials in every step of the way.
Second, educational systems’ roles are not solely defined in teaching new terms and knowledge, but to be an insparational place for students to evolve, to build character, and to have widen their interest. Institutions should be based on principles of growth and hard work, motivation and positivity. Educational institutions, encounter thousands of students every year, who are emerging from diverse realities and mentalities, and dreaming to become significant individuals in the society. Educational systems should embrace them, not discourage them.
Finally, opposite opinions of this matter would raise the fact that some students’ dreams and goals are not in accordance with their capacities, therefore educational systems as being part of society should address those students and mold them to fit societal needs and expectations. Although this opinion has some valid points, the question remains is what kind of society are we looking to build? A society with broken and raged persons, who feel the world had turn its back to, or a society where individuals feel they have fulfilled their whole potential and perceive themselves as capable and part of an encouraging and empowering culture.
In conclusion, for educational systems to lead students for better and compatible options in academic studies, it could be a place where different options are presented to fit the student’s personality, abilities, traits and conditions, but never abuse its power to shut down whatever hope relies within each student. In fact, leading students to understand better themselves and the academic subjects that are most suitable for their ambitions, would lead to best outcomes individually and socially.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: widened
...evolve, to build character, and to have widen their interest. Institutions should be ...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the best'.
Suggestion: to the best
...uitable for their ambitions, would lead to best outcomes individually and socially. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, nevertheless, second, similarly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 14.8657303371 222% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2637.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 462.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.70779220779 5.05705443957 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18655006393 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 800.1 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0035332227 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.117647059 118.986275619 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1764705882 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58823529412 5.21951772744 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138125130813 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489117174929 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401838255415 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0820872637243 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516467434213 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 14.1392134831 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.1639044944 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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