Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The topic raises the controversial issue of whether governments should invest money in major cities to help them thrive. Indisputably, the government should invest its money nation wise and distribute its finances equally. However, major cities are bigger in size and population, they encompass variety of people, attract tourism, and most if not all of the powerful and influential institutions of the country are placed in major cities. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that governments should hold their support for major cities, and would argue that for main cities to thrive educationally, culturally and economically, they need high financial help from the government.
First, whether we consider thriving educationally, psychologically or socially, environmentally or technologically, financial support is the main key to engender change. For example, we have witnessed how major cities around the world have thrived, when governmental initiations held place in empowering their educational systems. Finland, is one of those countries who has put their highest efforts and financial emphasis to build systematic longitudinal studies and broad research. For years, important questions regarding the flaws in their system have been raised. The huge collaboration between the government, education system and team of researchers later enriched the country’s educational institutions with the right methods and principles. As a result, Finland’s educational system today is considered one of the best in the world, and is ranked as the highest successful educational systems in the western countries.
Furthermore, from Dubai to Beijing, New York to Moscow, governments’ economical investments are bringing them to rapidly thrive and draw global interest and attraction economically and technologically. We have witnessed this phenomenon in the inevitable change that the United Arab Emirates and especially Dubai has gone through. With its skyscrapers emerging to be the highest in the world and its huge attraction to global investments in business and tourism.
Admittedly, some may say that major cities are shifting from traditional orientation to more liberal-universal approach and way of living. Especially in light of the changing technology, higher exposure to multicultural education and greater rates of tourism in the cities has changed their traditional focuses. However, it may seem that major cities are infused with many people of varying levels of cultural traditions; it is still difficult to assert that its cultural and traditional structure has fully diminished. In fact, many major cities focus their attention in highlighting traditional events and amplifying its emphasis into the city’s daily life. For example, in holidays, many major cities open the opportunity for its locals to engage in activities and events that preserve the traditional elements of its culture.
In conclusion, although major cities have wider open gates to globalization and multiculturalism, such cities still withhold the importance of its cultural costumes and traditions. In addition, major cities are highly important in so many aspects for the country and the nation as a whole, and supporting them financially might significantly help them thrive and evolve.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: bigger
...nces equally. However, major cities are bigger in size and population, they encompass variety ...
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Line 1, column 348, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...eople, attract tourism, and most if not all of the powerful and influential institutions o...
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Line 1, column 687, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...igh financial help from the government. First, whether we consider thriving educ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2835.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 489.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79754601227 5.05705443957 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28270355383 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531697341513 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 876.6 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1768745563 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.75 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.45 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266927122842 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850019953091 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624050536547 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153556962303 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0860611684671 0.0667264976115 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.1392134831 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 48.8420337079 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.66 12.1639044944 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.38706741573 118% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 100.480337079 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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