The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether the best way is to imbue young people with a sense of cooperation than competition, in order to prepare them for future leadership in any field. Indisputebly, competition is a significant factor in motivating and fueling individuals to persue their goals. Nevertheless, it is the imphasis of cooperation that help people to become kind humans as will as great leaders in any field. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that competition should be instilled in persons in order to prepare them for leadership roles, and would argue that cooperation is the key factor that any society should use to have better young leaders.
First, implanting a sense of cooperation help individuals have better relationships and view them as a mean to evolve and to be better leaders. Throughout history, we have witnessed great leaders who have accomplished high difference and had an incredibile impact over their nations. Many of these leaders are characterized with great collaboration skills, humbleness and a wide range of creativity.
Furthermore, a society who is looking to having professional leaders as well as moral ones, who have high moral standards, should embrace cooperation. Unfortunetly, today we encounter many intellegent young adults who seek education and later persue highly inflentual carears, however, many of them seem so ignoble and selfish, and therefore their contribution is mainly to achieve personal gain and not for the sake of doing good and helping others.
One might say, that without competition the process to motivate people in having a significant contribution, will be consideribly slower, if at all possible. Althoug this opinion has many true aspects, we are witnessing a world where competition is overly valued and highly spread, which in turn causes more disstress, anxiety and many more adverse side affects that its positive wanted outcomes.
In conclusion, both cooperation and competition are important factors in helping individuals to perpare for leadership roles and in achieving goals. However, every society, especially in light of this hectic, stressful and selfish world, should embrase and empower cooperation as a tool in building charachter, carear and future leadership. Only when societies put greater emphasis in cooperation, people will learn use their knowledge and leadership to contribute back.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 350, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[13]
Message: Did you mean 'side effects' (=adverse effect, unintended consequence)?
Suggestion: side effects
...isstress, anxiety and many more adverse side affects that its positive wanted outcomes. ...
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Line 17, column 417, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to use'
Suggestion: to use
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 373.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51206434316 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06493301292 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55764075067 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4015681047 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.857142857 118.986275619 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6428571429 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 5.21951772744 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180135349955 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606203443198 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683850065523 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0919904582664 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685480540916 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.1392134831 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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