The commercial airline industry in the country of Freedonia has experienced impressive growth in the past three years. This trend will surely continue in the years to come, since the airline industry will benefit from recent changes in Freedonia society: incomes are rising; most employees now receive more vacation time; and interest in travel is rising, as shown by an increase in media attention devoted to foreign cultures and tourist attraction.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
In the past three years, the commercial airline industry in the country of Freedonia has experienced substantial growth, and the author predicts this growth will continue in the upcoming years. The author based his or her prediction upon the recent economical and lifestyle changes in Freedonia society. However, in order to validate the author’s prediction, three questions must be answered.
First of all, does the rising incomes lead the residents of Freedonia to use more often the commercial airline industry? The raise in salaries might lead to different outcomes and reactions by people. Perhaps, with the raise in incomes, people will invest more money in mortgage, buy a new car or even add it to their savings. People might pay accumulated bills or loans or invest their money in small businesses. In the Freedonia country, different people might have diverse reactions. If not one of these scenarios has merit, then the prediction of the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, do employees use their vacation time to travel via commercial airline industry? In other words, once employees receive their vacation time, does it necessarily used to fly elsewhere? Maybe employees use their vacations to spend time with their families in Freedonia. Alternatively, perhaps, since they are getting more vacation time, they prefer to travel elsewhere using other modes of transportation (taking a road trip via RV or car). If either of these scenarios has merit, then the prediction drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Thirdly, is there a correlation between increased attention to tourist attraction in the media and increased interest in travel? The author’s assertion that the high interest in travel is linked to high attention in media to foreign cultures and tourist attraction. However, we are not sure if this assertion has been validated by the appropriate research and methodology. In addition, the great attention in the media to tourist places and foreign cultures might be due to the attractiveness of this subject, and the urge of the media to broadcast such content of high popularity to get better ranking. If either of these scenarios has merit, then the prediction drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
In conclusion, the prediction, as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer these three questions above and offer more evidence (perhaps in the form of a systematic study) then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed prediction that the growth in the past three years in the industry of commercial airline will continue in the years to come. Unless additional evidence is provided, neither the residents of Freedonia nor other readers for the argument should find it unpersuasive.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 459 350
No. of Characters: 2363 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.629 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.148 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.824 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 145 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 113 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.864 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.394 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 399, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion, three questions must be answered. First of all, does the rising incomes le...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 13.6137724551 15% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2450.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 459.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33769063181 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95830083041 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472766884532 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8466206795 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.363636364 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8636363636 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68181818182 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285088716025 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737543604972 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125675351906 0.0701772020484 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171328472665 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13953546568 0.0628817314937 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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