Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
From all the technological to the scientific advancements around the world, everything is contingent upon education. It forms the building block of all the inventions in the world and has been the most essential tool for mankind since ages. Encouraging students to choose a field of study that largely focus on lucrative aspects of careers, undoubtedly suppresses the very essence of education. I strongly advocate that institutions should not motivate their students to choose study fields that lay emphasis on a lucrative career ahead as this instills in students a sense of studying merely for the sake of money and not for education which may further lead to inscrupulous individuals.
Firstly, education is meritorious only when it teaches our subject of choice along with lessons for life. If education helps burgeon in us, a money oriented spirit, then it would fail us in achieving an overall development as individuals and results in our choices that are largely governed by monetory aspects. For instance, a well educated person is prolific and venerated by the society whereas on the other hand, a student who has been nurtured to focus on the monetary aspects of events like their own careers, they seem to lack a driven interest towards the betterment of the society.
Also, making the students aim for lucrative careers harms them in the long run, it never lets the learner to deep dive into the oceans of knowledge, thus failing to implant into the person a sense of mindfulness at some point in life and they never try to be meticulous in the task at hand. A lucrative career may seem a trap in near future, but always turns out harmful in the longer run. For example, when a student studies with a desire to pursue a higher education in a field of study, he puts himself completely into his field, whereas on the other hand, someone who is driven by monetary benefits, skips the essential aspects of knowledge that is needed in the longer run.
However, one may argue that in today's world, money is all that is needed to live one's best life, one should always keep in mind the how lucrative the career is before choosing a field of study. This doesn't hold true until someone really values the need for an education and how it helps in our brain's intellectual development. A wise man is always the one who is eager to learn as much as possible and not solely rely on the money that his career would yield.
In my view, educational institutions should encourage students to grow as intelligent and mindful individuals rather than individuals aiming for monetary benefits of a career as this tends to hinder the growth of the scholar as a whole and makes him stands far behind than people who are intelligent and driven by a desire of education merely for being intelligent individuals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 479, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to study'
Suggestion: to study
...d not motivate their students to choose study fields that lay emphasis on a lucrative...
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Line 7, column 82, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'ones the best'.
Suggestion: ones the best
...ld, money is all that is needed to live ones best life, one should always keep in mind th...
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Line 7, column 129, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'how'?
Suggestion: how
...st life, one should always keep in mind the how lucrative the career is before choosing...
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Line 7, column 200, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... before choosing a field of study. This doesnt hold true until someone really values t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, so, still, then, thus, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2330.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 483.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82401656315 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67411482508 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513457556936 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.9442995514 60.3974514979 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.428571429 118.986275619 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.5 23.4991977007 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.21951772744 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252472814775 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827021649682 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072511024094 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135903653506 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619389975362 0.0667264976115 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.1392134831 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.8420337079 93% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.27 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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