Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Nowadays, there are many debates about how should a student choose his or her major. The statement proposes that schools should encourage students to choose the fields that will lead them to lucrative careers. I do not agree with this prompt statment for the following reasons.
Primarily, if students choose to study a subjet that they have no interest at all, it is painful for them to mastering these skills and even spend years working in this field. Since they have no passion and enthusiasm for the subject, it is less likely that they will work hard and persist when they encounter difficulties. Take my high school classmate, John, as an instance. Even though he does not like biology and medical prectices, John still went to medical school in university simply because being a doctor in Taiwan guarantees high social status and high salary. However, he eventually dropped out because he could not withstand feeling disgusted whenever he sees blood. In this case, we can see students are less likely to succeed if they study only for seeking a lucrative career.
Some people may argue that one of the main goal of education is to prepare students for their future career and it would be a waste if students cannot find a decent work in the job market. Admittdly, different countries and societies have different nature of job markets, and some jobs are really rare in certain countries. However, as technologies has make the "distance" of countries shorter and even became a global village, people is no longer contrained by the lack of chance in job market of their own country. My own experience can be a good showcase to illustrate this. I studied engineering in Hong Kong where the atmosphere of jab market favors business students much more. Yet, instead of giving up my major and seek a business occupation in Hong Kong, I successfully found an intership oppotunity in silicon valley which has abundant job openings for engineers. Thus, schools should not make students worry too much about seeking job.
In conclusion, although I concede that if the education of students can lead them to a decent job is an important concern, I do not think school should urge students to choose major only based on the avaliably of job. Instead, I think people should follow their interest. Since when people truly have passion for their study, they have the inherent motivation to overcome difficulties and eventually succeed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 177, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to major'
Suggestion: to major
...k school should urge students to choose major only based on the avaliably of job. Ins...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, really, so, still, thus, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 410.0 442.535393258 93% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97073170732 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68082400963 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558536585366 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2250227533 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.263157895 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5789473684 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201944147114 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652899870382 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665916790311 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143381609757 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731933998827 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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