Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether students should be encouraged to pursue the most profitable future careers by their educational institutions or not. Indisputably, everybody wants to make money as much as he can. Nevertheless, lucrative careers may be not in his circle of interest. This career may be only a way to gain quick money. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that educational institutions should encourage students to choose those fields of careers. I would argue to encourage them to choose the study field of student's interest.
First of all, the society doesn't need only those lucrative careers but all careers are important to fulfill all needs. I would like to point out that offering all study fields for student to choose from all fields equal opportunity, will encourage him to do his best in that field. By this way, different study fields alumni fulfill society needs of different careers. For example, the society is in need for writers or journalists. In this circumstance, students should be offered to study literature. However, Technology careers are more profitable than writers’ careers. Consequently, it is pretty obvious that institutions should encourage student to choose all fields of study they offer.
Furthermore, encouraging students for only lucrative careers, lead to make a shortage in some fields which are not encouraged by educational institutions. Some of these fields may be disappear. Disappearing some careers may cause some disturbance in the nation. Both common sense and personal experience have told us that all careers fields are important to all nation. May be some of them have much more importance than other but they are all necessary.
Admittedly, encouraging students to study fields, that help them in making much money in their future career, is good. But here is the question, Does the market of those fields will be able to contain all numbers of graduated students if all of them want to work at the same careers? I would expect that growing up request for specific careers will cause (unemployment problem) some of those alumni will not have enough opportunities to work.
In conclusion, Educational institutions should encourage their students to choose the fields of study that student want. Encouraging students for specific fields that is lucrative is not a good way to fulfill society needs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 385.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24415584416 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90194623568 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444155844156 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9388061427 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7826086957 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7391304348 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292117574606 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107842050642 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0990137175216 0.0758088955206 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201511304709 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693411521373 0.0667264976115 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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