Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supp

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Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

As an old cliché goes, ‘To educate is one’s duty and to be educated is one’s right’, the role of education in grooming the future leaders is critical to all social context. In most scenarios, educators are the ones closely in contact with students and possess full comprehension on their capabilities and interests. Thus, they should be bestowed with the right to guide and encourage students to undertake a field with promising career outputs. This approach seizes benefits manifold. Primarily, it avoids the fault investment of resources and energy from the student’s end, especially those with financial constraints. Furthermore, as human resource providers, academic institutes have pretty accurate scale to evaluate skills required by the industry, thus, their suggestion is generally relevant and up-to-date. Lastly, the strategy could create a virtuous cycle of quality supply of students to better build the economy and social welfare.

One of the most critical function of any institution is to provide students with an appropriate study plan, which eventually leads to a successful career path. In any level of education, students are required to dedicate time, energy and money for a rewarding job opportunity. However, not all of us have prominent cognitive skills to distribute our limited resources in hand. Thus, we expect schools to cater hints on how our resources could be better distributed. For instance, if a student doesn’t have the capability to pursue a science major despite his strong interest, the intervention of the institute become tremendously essential to prevent more energy being wasted. Instead, a multi-disciplinary approach might be more suitable to reduce the burden of pure science subjects.

The industry is commonly reliant on educational institution for the supply of potential graduates while academics obtain funding from the industry to ensure students are groomed according to the standard required. This mutual working relationship grants most schools the right to point students to the right direction. The evident could be easily observed in the field of Information Technology. With the flourishing demands over the past couple decades, more schools have motivated students to enroll in this prospective industry as the financial return would be much higher. This scenario is especially relevant for developing countries, where securing a profitable job is definitely the primary focus for most educational institution. With the assistance from the school, students could be more confident on their professional choices, at least from a financial consideration. However, one might argue that luring students towards the field of money instead of field of interest would likely jeopardize the desire to thrive for more potential future. To me, it all depends on the maturity level of the students. If a student is an independent-thinker, he would take in the encouragement as an advice and justify accordingly. On the other hands, with the absence of such reasoning skills, students could definitely need some help from the school.

The development of educational institutions and graduates are mutually correlated in a perpetually cycle. When an institute is able to produce industry leaders and influencers, its reputation would be elevated and stronger alumni could be built. Reversely, students could also leverage the fame of their al maters in their network building and professional development. Some individual might oppose to place the ‘want of connection’ as priority as it goes against the holistic virtue of education. However, as any other business, education system requires a sustainable fiscal structure for it to sustain. The only way for educational institutes to continue ground-breaking research and providing ultimate learning environment is to rely on the achievement of graduates, who eventually return and help their juniors.

In summary, as most of us are do not possess bottomless resource to lavish, we should spend it wisely. Thus, academic institutes should develop a strategy to diligently monitor and vigorously encourage students to thrive for fields of guaranteed success.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You used an adverb ('perpetually') instead an adjective, or a noun ('cycle') instead of another adjective.
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Suggestion: done
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, furthermore, however, if, lastly, so, thus, while, at least, for instance, in summary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 93.0 58.6224719101 159% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3570.0 2235.4752809 160% => OK
No of words: 638.0 442.535393258 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59561128527 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02579962599 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15193278486 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 332.0 215.323595506 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520376175549 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 1128.6 704.065955056 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1162791481 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.161290323 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5806451613 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.12903225806 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 10.2758426966 234% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202857652604 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539012775802 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446869197481 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125952489483 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175211474389 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 48.8420337079 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 12.1743820225 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.2 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.38706741573 117% => OK
difficult_words: 211.0 100.480337079 210% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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