Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers. Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take.

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Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

The speaker asserts that educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers. I concede that this proposition might bring tangible benefits for students and educational institutions for a short time. However, institutions who put this goal at first place might lose the long-term benefits. Moreover, this decision will impede the development of cutting-edge technologies.

Granted, encouraging students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers might be beneficial for both students and institutions. Students studying in a lucrative working field are not concerned with money and lead an easier life. While their counterparts are under the pressure of house rent, scholar debts and traffic costs, students majoring in a high-paid field can earn their life easily or even financially help their parents and relatives. Working in a lucrative field gives students a sense of independence and a sense of accomplishment. In addition, economic success of students can in turn benefits the institutions. First, successful alumni may give financial supports to schools that can be used to renovate buildings, ameliorate facilities and augment faculties’ salaries. These moneys can help institutions to ameliorate teaching qualities. Second, the financial success obtained by alumni improve institutions’ reputation that will attract more intelligent students. Thus, a positive circle formed which can enhance further the double-win situation.

The speaker’s suggestion seems bring benefits for all parts, the students and the institutions. However, the speaker oversimplified the reality and begs several important questions that will result in harmful consequences. First question is the nature of education. Plato once said that the true education is a group of people freely sharing their understanding about the world and during this process everyone gradually forms their personality and the value. Accordingly, the money-oriented education is not the true education and it will definitely stigmatize the purity of education and teaching. Second question is about to distinguish the lucrative careers among at least thousands type of careers. Even the most successful investors, who earn their lives by recognizing the potential lucrative fields, carry the risk of wrong estimations, how can educational institutions guarantee a lucrative future to their students. It is very possible that the lucrative careers in which students are encouraged to study, will be unprofitable in several years. Under that circumstances, should students change to another lucrative fields of study or not? Constantly adjusting the focus of studying according to profitable industries, students easily lose their studying initiatives and likely regret about earlier decision. In conclusion, the speaker’s suggestion is untenable in front of the reality and it carries the risk of defame the institutions and wrongly guide students into an unprofitable studying field.

Another significant result brought by the speaker’s argument is the stagnant scientific research. Institutions’ encouragement in lucrative careers will absolutely impedes the advance of non-lucrative field, such as the cutting-edge scientific research. However, these non-lucrative studying fields often have far-reaching benefits and are in eager of intelligent students. Taking the research into smart cities as an example, this is a new-born research area which has limited tangible benefits, but it plays an important role in ameliorating people’s life and enhancing social well-being. Another example is the studies into orbital angular momentum of lights, which largely depends on the nations’ financial supports and is to the core technique of the quantum communication. Terraforming, biotechnology, robotics and the like, even though all these cutting-edge technologies could not promise the short-term material benefits, they bring intangible, unquantifiable and far-reaching benefits to humankind. In another word, scientific research portraits human’s future. Speaker’s assertion which ignoring the necessity of studying into non-lucrative fields, will surely impede the development of cutting-edge technologies and render human a dimmer future.

All told, although the speaker’s assertion seems like to bring clear material benefits to students and institutions, it has oversimplified the reality that tends to bring harmful results to students, institutions and the society. First, institutions run the risks of wrongly predicting the lucrative careers of the future and it will make students regret about their decisions. Secondly, promoting material success defame educational institutions who should prioritize knowledge over money. Third, preparing students for lucrative careers impedes the advance of non-lucrative scientific research that benefits all humankind.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thus, well, while, at least, in addition, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4305.0 2235.4752809 193% => OK
No of words: 709.0 442.535393258 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.07193229901 5.05705443957 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.16014088096 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30820752088 2.79657885939 118% => OK
Unique words: 329.0 215.323595506 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464033850494 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1306.8 704.065955056 186% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.2370786517 178% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.1382174499 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.583333333 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6944444444 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05555555556 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 10.2758426966 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303679139741 0.243740707755 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086093795155 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964527021328 0.0758088955206 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20470649447 0.150359130593 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075352525433 0.0667264976115 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.8420337079 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.93 12.1639044944 147% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 199.0 100.480337079 198% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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