Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
There are many kinds of educational institutions from elementary school, middle school, high school, community college, university, to the lifelong education center. As there are a number of educational institutions, as there are a lot of purposes for them. For one, its educational purpose may be teaching students fundamental common knowledge, and for another, it may have an eye to pass on knowledge to posterity. And for some, they may make students get good jobs. However, I disagree that all educational institutions should put their students to the field of research which is related to lucrative jobs.
Some contend that specific educational institutions need to recommend actively for their students to join fields that will help them for job opportunities that will provide them a lot of money. For example, it is the purpose of educations in most of the lifelong education centers that teaching and giving training students to adapt to a new work environment. My mother also has been trained in the lifelong education center after retiring from her office job. And now, she has successfully been reemployed in the field of social welfare which is one of the promising and well-earned job fields in Korea. As my mother’s case, some educational institutions’ educational programs may focus on encouraging people to prepare for lucrative careers.
However, the experiences of specific institutions cannot be generalized to every educational institution. Actually, most types of schools have not vocational but other educational purposes. For instance, universities’ purpose is to pass on knowledge to posterity. That is why they maintain fields of study unrelated to making money such as aesthetics, philosophy, and history. In fact, rather than supporting practical studies that help students find employment, the university I graduated has forced all students to take humanities classes as a necessity. My experience proves that an educational institution called a university is more interested in transferring valuable academic assets than preparing students for a well-earned job.
Even more seriously, if educational institutions push their students to choose fields which will make them easier to get lucrative jobs by compulsion, it may cause bad results. At some time, the area of money is bound to be limited. If all educational institutions encourage students to engage in those fields, competition naturally can only intensify. This could rather create more students who are out of the competition. Therefore, educational institutions should rather allow students to gain experience in various fields so that they can choose their own careers that suit their own specialties.
Educational institutions have as many different educational goals as they are of different kinds. Therefore, it is not appropriate for educational institutions to concentrate on encouraging their students to engage in the fields of study which will help to find well-earned jobs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, as for, for example, for instance, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2538.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 459.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52941176471 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25821345635 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483660130719 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 808.2 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9172189147 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.347826087 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9565217391 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341989273279 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10764519216 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840911771921 0.0758088955206 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223223638989 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465367425817 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.8420337079 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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