61. People should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Risks from any action can vary with the impact and the range of people affected. Thus, some risks can harm huge people strongly but others do not. Under these circumstances, people will consider differently depending on how serious the risks expected to be caused by action are and decide their actions. In other words, if the consequences are expected to have a big impact on many people, people need to think long before they do anything risky, but if the risk is to the extent that only a few people can afford and not so fatal, they can make an immediate decision without thinking much.
Firstly, people should consider the consequences of action carefully when the expected negative consequences of taking action are too fatal or affect many people. There could be some circumstances that the bad consequences of one’s actions are damaging and even taking lives away from many people. In these circumstances, people should weigh the results of their actions and carefully behave. For example, politicians such as congressmen, presidents, or prime ministers have to consider carefully when they decide whether it is better to do risky action or not. This is due to the fact that their decisions affect almost of the people of society because they are made in the form of policy. Thus, the negative effects of their acts could also spread out for society. For example, the politicians could be in a circumstance where they have to decide whether to join the war or not. Participating in war is a decision of great risk as a nation since their many resources and citizens can be sacrificed. Therefore, they should consider the issue prudently to minimize its negative effects from participating in the war.
However, whether the consequences of taking risks are good or bad, people do not have to think deeply if the impact is focused on only the person who has acted or a few people and the effect is expected to be minimal. There could be some circumstance which even if one decides to do something risky but the impact of that choice is not so significant. The effects of behavior may be small enough for only the person who did the action to be responsible, or it may not be crucial even if it affects others. For example, when I was an undergraduate student, I had to decide whether I should study all night before the exam day or just sleep and go to the exam even though I did not study enough. Going to the exam without studying all night was a risky decision for me since I could get a bad grade. It was risky enough for me, but I did not think much about it and decided to just go to sleep and take the exam because even if my grade was poor, it was my responsibility, and it was not going to do much harm to others.
To sum up, people consider differently about the consequences of risky actions according to the expected negative results’ influences. They need to consider carefully about risky action when its impacts are expected to affect many people very negatively. However, they do not need to think about it cautiously when the impacts are not much huge and are manageable.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, such as, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2566.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 548.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68248175182 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67007907874 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.38503649635 0.4932671777 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 824.4 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2897296117 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.636363636 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9090909091 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13636363636 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 5.13820224719 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175280026444 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650329735758 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419915243294 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119470666474 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285943489831 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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