44. Claim: It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.
Reason: The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
People name someone a hero who solves a social problem or saves others. I think that though media scrutiny can diminish someone’s reputation, it is still possible for a society to consider any living person as a hero. Critics would assert that because media can reveal an individual’s unjust achievements and immoral behavior, the contemporary person would not be regarded as a hero. However, since the media show people’s not only bad but also positive outcomes and these days ubiquitous social media can unearth individual’s unseen good deed, a society can regard any living man or woman as a hero.
First of all, when media reveal a figure’s positive achievement, people could regard him or her like a hero even he or she has a bad achievement also. Opponents would assert that the media could emphasize one’s unjust achievements, leading people to evaluate that the one is not a hero. At this point, we need to remind the definition of “hero” as defined above. The “hero” is just a person who solves people’s facing problem or saves others from dangerous circumstances. It does not mean the “perfect” one. Therefore, if one had achieved a positive result, which society needs, and it is well promoted by the media, people in the society think him or her as a hero as long as the dark side of him or her performance does not harm the positive outcome. For instance, though Bill Clinton had a hard time because of a sex scandal with his secretary, the media have also reported his economic achievements and people value them highly. There is a famous phrase “When Clinton lied, no one died.” which point out that people do not care about his scandal when they evaluate his achievements as a president. Therefore, he succeeded in reelection.
Secondly, the media can unearth people’s unseen good behavior and make them become a hero among people. Although critics contend that the media can show an individual’s immoral problem such as reporting “#Metoo movement” and bring him or her to ruin, they also introduce people’s unknown good deeds. Especially, these days ubiquitous spread of social media, such as Twitter, Instagram, Facebook etc., has allowed people’s good deeds to become known and disseminated more quickly. For example, recently in Korea, several men have saved children who trapped in a burning school bus. The video showing them saving the children has spread quickly through social media. In the end, they were honored by the local police.
In conclusion, I think that even the media scrutiny can diminish the reputation of anyone, it is possible for people to consider any living person as a hero. It is because the media can show anyone’s positive achievement and nowadays spreading social media can disseminate people’s good deeds quickly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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People name someone a hero who solves a ...
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...ard any living man or woman as a hero. First of all, when media reveal a figure...
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...ro even he or she has a bad achievement also. Opponents would assert that the media ...
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...herefore, he succeeded in reelection. Secondly, the media can unearth people&a...
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...hey were honored by the local police. In conclusion, I think that even the med...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 58.6224719101 51% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 463.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22678185745 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15019221387 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481641468683 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3690269806 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.238095238 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0476190476 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09523809524 5.21951772744 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149377443593 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575319861036 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550302847136 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120402886192 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566405513131 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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