In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future
With the accelerating development of technologies, human is at the edge of the third time of technological revolution, that of information. According to a research conducted by the Harvard University, a study present that the amount of information received by modern people within a month equals to the amount of information received by people of past during their whole life. In my opinion, the richness of information help people enormously in identifying careers and jobs which could lead to a successful future.
To begin with, how can we define a secure and successful life? In my opinion, whether a life is successful or not depends more on a person’s inner world and not on the opinions of other people. Doing what a person is good at makes him/her feel secure. Majoring in what a person is fascinating in and devoting himself/herself whole heartedly in this field gives the person a strong sense of accomplishment. Thus, to find the career which is more easily leading to success means to find a job which you are better at and fascinate about. To sum up, only after a thorough self-definition and self-understanding, can we identify a job which could lead to a secure and successful life.
In the past, the lack of information and the inconvenience in communication provided ordinary people very limited range of jobs and precluded them from choosing the field in which they were really good at. Due to the lack of information, only riches and nobles had access to education. Most people remained uninformed during their whole lives. They irritated a job from their ancestors and passed this job to their children. Take Black Smiths as an example. In the past, the family of Smiths casted iron from generation to generation and rarely changed jobs. As people in the past exposed to a very small range of jobs, we can hardly think that they have chosen the job after a thorough self-examination. I challenge the claim that people in the past have chosen their job actively rather than they were forced to work in this field. I also raise the question whether people in the past, who were rarely well-educated, developed fully their self-consciousness or not. It not so, they could not neither liberate their imagination, nor cast their talents during working. Thus, we cannot conclude that people in the past were easier to identify the career which would lead to a secure and successful life.
In a sharply contrast, people in today are more informed than people in the past because of the increasing advances of information technologies. Unlike students in the past, who had to travel thousands of miles to listen to Confucius’ lecture, students in today can read Socrates, Aristotle, Plato with his/her laptop. The easy access to the knowledge facilitates the process of self-discovering. A well-developed personality helps students to recognize their interests, find adequate jobs, or even creates new professions that do not exist before. Take the famous fashion blogger Chiara Ferragni as an example. A reportage of Coco Chanel attracts Chiara to the fashion world at a very young age. From university, she began to post daily wearing online and gained celebrity within her school. With the increasing number of followers, she came to realize that there are many girls like her fascinate about clothes and shoes. Thus, she abandoned her former major and devoted herself wholeheartedly in her fashion blog. Finally, Chiara gained a self-made success and opened a new business domain. Her experience is widely spread throughout Internet and encourages other girls to pursuit their dreams. The example of Chiara illustrates how information technology helps people to find their interests, chose the job on their personality and provides new starters huge opportunities to change the world.
In order to find the job in which we are more likely to succeed, we must understand our own very desires thoroughly and deeply. One way to self-define is to read, think, write and accumulate life experiences. In today, technology facilitates this process. However, in the past most people remained uninformed and rarely had chance to identify their own interest let alone to identify the job in which they can display their interest.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, really, so, third, thus, well, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 124.0 52.1666666667 238% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3570.0 1977.66487455 181% => OK
No of words: 698.0 407.700716846 171% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11461318052 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.1400087186 4.48103885553 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00615947184 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 328.0 212.727598566 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469914040115 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1123.2 618.680645161 182% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6003584229 175% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8609958505 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1666666667 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3888888889 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.72222222222 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198263579555 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047632147242 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684800399957 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119726832512 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532127641967 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 169.0 86.8835125448 195% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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