Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
A great career without a great education is merely a dream. The prompt recommends that the students should be discouraged from perusing the fields of study in which they may not succeed. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the given statement mostly for the given two reasons.
Firstly, one’s full potential on any field cannot be determined today. Those of them who show high potential in a particular field of study, today, may be out beaten by the one that lacks potential in near future. For an instance; Albert Einstein who later won the Nobel prize was not good at academics. Later, when his uncle taught him maths - caught his interest so deeply that in future he gave the theory of relativity. On the other hand, Nicola Tesla who showed promises to change the world, during current war in 1880's was shadowed by his arch rival Thomas Edison. Although later he was praised for his work at that time, he died without a dime in his pocket on the other hand Edison patented products and made fortune.
Secondly, Institutions are to guide, teach, provide with skill than an individual seeks with them. Their sole focus should be to improve qualities of an individual, who lacks essential qualities to succeed in particular field. For an instance, if the institution that receives monthly fees from an individual and discourages him or her by saying they lack traits to succeed in the particular field. Then, only, should the student be solely responsible or institutions should be accountable for their orthodox teaching method.
Some might argue that why follow the field and waste time, money and energy in which one has no talent. But people who follow their passion can provide additional contributing in that field rather than the dispassionate ones. So, institutions should focus on improving their education delivery method rather than dissuading students from perusing their goal.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 516, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1880s'.
Suggestion: in the 1880s
...to change the world, during current war in 1880s was shadowed by his arch rival Thomas E...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in particular, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 316.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01582278481 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58593508721 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607594936709 0.4932671777 123% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1137317258 60.3974514979 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.0625 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174328823164 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602418454884 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672665493325 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119070359895 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571735382356 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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