Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position
In this current age where there are a lot of professional college courses, students try and choose the courses they like. It is in the hands of students whether they make the most of their time at the institution and flourish or completely fail at it. The prompt suggests that educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. In my opinion, I don’t agree with what the prompt suggests for two main reasons. As I feel that the decision to choose a field of study should remain with the student himself and there shouldn’t be any influence by the institution on this .
To begin, Students spend a humungous amount of time on choosing what their field of study should be. They take into account interests, their fluency in the field, their confidence and if they would be interested to pursue that field if they are not familiar with it. So, students are already capable of choosing what they like and how they would fare in that particular field. If the institution persuades them to no take their interested field, it just wastes the pain and effort taken by the student to find what they would like to do. They would nit like what they are persuing and would ultimately fail completely.
Further, the prompt suggests that the institution will dissuade students from choosing a field, the only way this can be done is by reviewing the past performance the student in that area. But this could prove a wrong method to evaluate how the students might perform if they were to choose that area. As the conditions which influenced their performance to be in that manner are not taken into account. If a student wants to pursue a career in acting, but his performance pertaining to the acting related courses is poor, it might be due to a variety of conditions. The student can have a knack for acting but is still improving. As acting skills can be honed through rigorous practice. So, directly persuading the student to consider other areas is flawed.
Of course, a few people might think that the educational institute’s persuasion is completely justifiable. But, students are the one who ultimately get into that field and they might not really like what it offers.In conclusion, students should be entitled to choose their own career path and field of study in their own way, and educational institutions should not be allowed to dissuade them from their chosen field of study.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... professional college courses, students try and choose the courses they like. It is in ...
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...any influence by the institution on this . To begin, Students spend a humungous...
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...rform if they were to choose that area. As the conditions which influenced their p...
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...nack for acting but is still improving. As acting skills can be honed through rigo...
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...ey might not really like what it offers.In conclusion, students should be entitled...
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Suggestion: to field
...owed to dissuade them from their chosen field of study.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, still, i feel, in conclusion, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82938388626 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62749340397 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443127962085 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5346453747 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.263157895 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2105263158 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94736842105 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247544623618 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935037943621 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0946400582811 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174020004494 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520491184505 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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