Essay topic 5: Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely alligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Art is an integral part of our society which reflects society’s perspective over various subjects. The use of government funding to develop art has been a prolonged discussion with contrasting viewpoints. While some argue that it would be better for artists to protect their independence with regard to governments. This essay agrees that government should allocate money to support art in order to boom the art and be accessible to commoners.
To begin with, arts preserve a country’s unique culture; for instance, Persian New Year customs using various artistic decorative items and special traditional dance and music have helped conserve Persian New Year culture so far. Moreover, government investigating in museums, galleries, and music can make it possible to be open to app people for free or a little admission which encourage more commoners to visit such places and appreciate artworks such as painting, sculptures and musicians. Some visitors could also be inspired by visiting artists and pursue their own interests.
In addition, specific types of arts such as movies and concerts are invested by private investors as they are mainly concerned with making quick money by increasing the ticket prices or taking high advantages of the contracts. Other types of arts like calligraphy, traditional handicrafts and cuisines are overlooked. Therefore, the government funding can balance such a fraud market and make it more affordable to wide audience. Furthermore, other types of art could flourish by governments support.
Some artists frequently live a difficult life and struggle with poverty. For example, Van Gogh sustained himself with basic needs of life and saved his money to provide art supplies some people are talented but they cannot afford taking art courses and they leave their interests and talents behind. If government funding were available to artists, they could develop their genuine talents and creative minds. Funding also could be used for viable promotion of art to appeal large number of audiences to help make more revenues for the artists to create more art. General public are exposed to artworks as well that they might not have discovered before.
In contrary, some argue that government funding may impose restrictions on artists. Some artists who come from hardships create pure and genuine art. Therefore, funded artists might opt to compromise their art and lose their integrity of their works. Besides, some artists are iconoclasts and their art contest government positions; as a result, they should be free to illustrate different perspectives of the society. Artists who depend on government funding to make their artworks would not contend with the governmental views. For instance, there are lots of restricted rules on singers and musicians in Iran. Hence, they have to either abandon the country or present ingenious and limited art. In such cases, government should not interfere in and provide money to affiliated institutions to sponsor the artists to develop art without restrictions.
In conclusion, government should fund the arts to develop and popularize them among people. Although government funding might cause the arts to lose integrity and genuineness in some cases, it can provide the artists with opportunities to present their talents and hand over the power to the affiliated communities without meddling in art development to ensure purity and integrity of art. Thus, the advantages of government funding to art outweighs the disadvantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 231, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to take'.
Suggestion: to take
...ple are talented but they cannot afford taking art courses and they leave their intere...
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Line 9, column 565, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: Public
...ues for the artists to create more art. General public are exposed to artworks as well that th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in some cases, to begin with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2993.0 2235.4752809 134% => OK
No of words: 550.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44181818182 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85248564942 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507272727273 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 918.9 704.065955056 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3691906291 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.851851852 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3703703704 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14814814815 5.21951772744 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38878088631 0.243740707755 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127749372346 0.0831039109588 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828113539348 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24299784207 0.150359130593 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0932678354797 0.0667264976115 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 100.480337079 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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