The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette."On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents i

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.

"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

In his letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette, the writer tries to prove his plan to decrease the accidents during the summer by limiting the number of mopeds rented.According to me, the writer would need to be answerable to many questions to claim that his recommendation is valid.

Firstly, he mentioned that the mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation but he did not mention any alternative transport facility to the visitors.Is there any possibility of other means?Will the visitors be able to reach the destination during the burning summer days.

Moreover, he mentioned that the population ranges to 10000 during summer days.So will all the people be able to find a moped? By reducing the number of rentals from 50 percent to 25 percent there may be chances of trouble to the population.There might the situation that the people turn down to visit the Balmer Islands again due to lack of transportation facilities.

In addition to the above facts, there is no strong evidence provided that the accidents are increased only due to increased number of mopeds.The writer neither mentioned the influence of climatic conditions nor about the island.He did not provide any information about the population, their issues or reasons behind accidents.

Furthermore ,he took the example about the Seaville’s town Council enforcement but neither mentioned the reason they enforced the limitation.IS there any common reason for the accidents ?The Population of Seaville is not mentioned.Is there any other means of transportation?

I believe that a more evidences is to be provided by the writer and he needs to answer the questions in order to accept his recommendation.A proper study is needed before recommending.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, may, moreover, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 280.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31071428571 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15985460464 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.2370786517 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 23.0359550562 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.2017277848 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 212.428571429 118.986275619 179% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.0 23.4991977007 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.14285714286 5.21951772744 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212298387109 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092497167272 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626395854837 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980105731245 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710897641601 0.0667264976115 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.6 14.1392134831 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.88 48.8420337079 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 12.1743820225 155% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.11 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 11.2143820225 161% => OK
text_standard: 24.0 11.7820224719 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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