An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument relating to the deficiency of vitamin A in poor nations of Tagus is being discussed. Here an international development organisation has produced a new breed of millet to overcome the deficiency of vitamin A.The argument claims an optimistic idea at first glance , but the organisation had to answer many questions regarding the recommendation.
Firstly, the organisation did not provide any information about the new breed of millet experiment.They did not mention any related information like the source of the experiment or its impact on the people.They did not mention whether they tested the new breed or not?Did it really succeed in achieving the optimum amount of vitamin A. Did any food provisioning authority certified the company? These questions are to be answered before recommending it to the people.
More over,It should ensure that there will be no possible side effects using the new product.
Secondly, they mentioned that the millet is a staple food in Tagus and anticipated that will people will adopt to the new variety.But there is no proper survey that indicates or acts as evidence that millet is main consuming food.There may be a possibility that people already adopted other varieties which are enriched with vitamin A. Did they find alternate idea to approach people and get the feedback about adopting the new variety of millet? Did they conduct any survey?
In addition, there are chances that the deficiency of vitamin A has serious impact on the people in former days.Will the people turn up?
Lastly, the organisation mentioned that the cost of the new breed seeds are higher compared to precedent.How long will the government will be able to provide the subsidies to the farmers ? definitely there will be an increase in the cost price of the millet.Will the consumers are ready to pay?In case if the people don't turn up, there are chances that the farmers will be in loss. Is there any guarantee that the organisation or any scheme to help farmers.
Considering above mentioned claims, the organisation should make a proper analysis and survey about introducing the new breed.If the response from the people is positive, then the government can do his best to support and promote the discovery.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1833 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.811 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.701 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.703 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.391 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.771 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14945652174 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89379200017 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 97.9671956758 57.8364921388 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.357142857 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364053135561 0.218282227539 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119300150952 0.0743258471296 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813205646007 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170252280043 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0714230089166 0.0628817314937 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 12.3882235529 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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