The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The letter concludes that the shoppers in the Central Plaza would increase if skateboarding is removed. It is also assumed that the number of skateboard users has been increasing rapidly which is the main reason for the decrease in the business of Central Plaza. I shall suggest ways to improve the reasoning so that the argument has some validity.
First of all, the argument assumes that as the skateboard users are increased which is why the business has been reduced but when we think deeply about the given assumption this might be one of the reason because it is not mentioned in the argument whether the skateboarding is free of the cost or charges fee for the users and whether there are any timings for skateboarding or not since there is no clear description about the time and charges to be paid assuming it be free so youth and kids might be more interested in skateboarding than to shopping.
Second, the argument has mentioned that there is a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza so this could be one of the main reason for the decrease of the shoppers because of the lack of cleanliness and hygiene in the mall and prejudicial of private property which leads to a disturbance for shoppers.
Hence I conclude that the reasoning is flawed, the decrease of shoppers is due to litter and vandalism it is one of the main causes and no cost skateboarding. I believe that the argument would vastly improve if there is clear description about the charges on skateboarding and the amount of litter.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is why the business has been reduced but when we think deeply about the given ass...
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Line 3, column 471, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...time and charges to be paid assuming it be free so youth and kids might be more in...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... leads to a disturbance for shoppers. Hence I conclude that the reasoning is flawed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 58.6224719101 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1281.0 2235.4752809 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 270.0 442.535393258 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74444444444 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7577947891 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 215.323595506 54% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433333333333 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 397.8 704.065955056 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.2370786517 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 23.0359550562 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 156.893828653 60.3974514979 260% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 183.0 118.986275619 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.5714285714 23.4991977007 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.21951772744 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169239353485 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112932456246 0.0831039109588 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115004242031 0.0758088955206 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122472094541 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10272053039 0.0667264976115 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 14.1392134831 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.37 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 12.1743820225 139% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 100.480337079 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.2143820225 153% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.7820224719 144% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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