Formal Education tends to restrain our mind and spirit rather than set them free.

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Formal Education tends to restrain our mind and spirit rather than set them free.

Formal Education tends to restrain mind and spirit. I totally agree with this statement. There are many supporting theories and examples to buttress it.

If you ask someone what do they think about formal education, most of the response would be that it is boring and tedious. This is not a surprise. People tend to get exhausted from a curriculum that is designed to give holistic knowledge. As it goes to such a depth that not everybody would be interested to dive in. Some people reason that what will be the use of all this that they are learning now. In reality this statement is valid,most of the knowledge that they gain now would not be useful in future. For example, studying Shakespeare books in literature class that are written in medieval English would not be useful to someone who pursue's a degree in engineering in the future. This creates a mentality of resistance that somehow gets embedded in persons mind and thus inhibit their full growth.

One may also argue that a more flexible curriculum would be lead to a much better development of the individual. Everyone has some subjects in college or school that they love and want to know more about. But this passion ends most of the time as it is not allowed to be explored more in depth. One way of promoting a free mind mentality is to give options in school so that students can choose whatever they are interested in and find out their passion. Finding something that you truly love learning is the key to a free mind and spirit.

Specialists are needed to make monumental discovery in any field. General populace are now understanding this aspect therefore homeschooling has become prominent in many places. They try to hone the skills of their kids which would make them more successful ahead in life and their argument is that spending time and money on formal education would be futile. Homeschooling has been shown to yield better results as many are joining top colleges in the country and produce better results.

In sum, formal education seem to create a mentality where one is exhausted and creativity is sapped by absorbing facts and figures that mean nothing in the future.But one must not forget that this holistic curriculum imparts knowledge that qualifies one to be ubiquitously educated and gives a better overall understanding of the world.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 401.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84289276808 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64463811005 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528678304239 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.9196607991 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4761904762 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0952380952 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.47619047619 5.21951772744 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141794244868 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523339821444 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12496834143 0.0758088955206 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103834868337 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0844424319592 0.0667264976115 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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