Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
This argument state that formal education tends to restrain students mind and spirits rather than set them free. Some people might believe that formal education are restrict our minds. However, the following essay will argue that it is plausible to disagree with the author’s statement and present following reasons to support this point of view.
Admittedly, formal education can loss students diversity by indoctrinate equal curriculum for a long period of time. To be specific, each of students have different perspective and personalities so formal education with equal way will harmful for students to be a creative. For example, there might be some student who hate to learn a Math but by the curriculum they need to take those course forcefully, can lead their spirits suppressed by the education. Moreover, younger age of students are more easily to adapt those educations and had no power of criticize their thoughts.
However, the formal education is not just restrain the students might but help them to be creative. Most of the creative mind and thoughts can be derived by the basic knowledge. For example, innovative algorithms nowadays are based on the mathematical basis and the basic grammars of the programming languages. If we don’t take the formal education, we are hard to understand not just create new things.
Finally, at the young age with rudimental knowledge, they might not know what areas are really fit for them. Most of some students nowadays don’t have clear position of the future visions. Therefore, by learning broad area of subject can lead them to choose their career and help to be a creative by giving basic steps. Also, if they have other interest, they have plenty of chances to take an extra-education besides of formal curriculum.
To sum up, I do not agree with the author’s statement that formal education circumscribe students mind and sprits. What is the free spirits and mind? That is not just naturally occurs without any basic education. Because of those reasons that I discussed above, I strongly disagree with the statement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'restricted'.
Suggestion: restricted
...might believe that formal education are restrict our minds. However, the following essay...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ndoctrinate equal curriculum for a long period of time. To be specific, each of students have ...
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Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...ual way will harmful for students to be a creative. For example, there might be some stude...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, however, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 341.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15249266862 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73492132161 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521994134897 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2604869373 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.4736842105 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9473684211 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.10526315789 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302084857222 0.243740707755 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103911298039 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161322664171 0.0758088955206 213% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184028482594 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139137156723 0.0667264976115 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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