Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free
The author stated that instead of making our mind free, formal education is making it limited. Many of us will argue that this will hold all the time, while others will counter the statement. In my essay, I will highlight both the side of the statement and will provide sound reasoning for the same.
As we know education plays a major role in shaping the career of students. The more successful students are in their career the better the growth opportunities and a great future which in turn proves out to be useful for the society, the country they are residing in one way or another. However, the process or the way education has to be delivered is different from place to place. In some countries, students have to follow certain resources to learn special majors and their teachers induce them to memorize the content of boring books instead of illustrating their creativity. For example, in India, the students are force to remember things that were taught in the class because the final term exam questions will come from the teacher notes. So, their educational institutes tend to restrain their student's minds.
While, if you look at the western countries, their education system is completely different, they focused on the practical as well as the theoretical knowledge of the subject. Students are being taught different skills and also practical usage of these skills and that is the reason why the western countries are so developed when compared to other countries. n addition, formal educations in developed countries take key factors into account when they want to set their long term vision in order to rear right persons for their societies. They pay utmost attention to their students mind and allow them to use their mind for solving problems. For instance, students would be able free in their classrooms and find new solutions for their math problems instead of copying their teacher answers. Their formal educations adopt a flexible strategy to teach their students and are far from those are implemented in developing countries.
In nutshell, the purpose of the education system is to guide the student and make them realize what is good for them or their area of interest, not to force them to learn only certain things that were taught in the class.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, so, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 385.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95064935065 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50600223972 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548051948052 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6443968382 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.125 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0625 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160177286231 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621894934533 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679641001495 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10277251323 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0140878444139 0.0667264976115 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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