Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
I mostly disagree with the statement. I think that formal education is crucial for developing individual thinking. However, if students only focus on some trivial details to have better scores on tests, their minds and spirits would be restrained.
First, students need to learn some basic knowledge in order to have the ability to think. Formal education is one of the best ways for students to build their foundations. For example, without learning basic calculation such as addition and multiplication, people can't even imagine there are a lot of rooms for research, including linear algebra which is related to some mathematic operations in high dimensional space. For another example, people need to acquire how to read and write to express their thoughts. Without such ability, we are not different with primates. It is because such a ability of communication that allows to have this great society.
Second, students need a direction to guide them to learn. Since people are curious in too many things, we are likely to be distracted if there isn't any guideline for us to follow. For example, when we were kids, we might be interested in many different things, such as playing around with friends and finding why there is cloud in the sky. Without a designed curriculum, we would probably have spent most of our time on playing since we didn't know how to control our time.
However, many people might possibly lose the ability to think as an individual under formal education. One of the reasons is that formal education requires some system to evaluate whether the student has learned the context taught in classes and the main approach is by taking exams. But since exams usually have fixed answers and students only want to get higher scores, they could just memorize the answers and lose the ability to think whether the answers is reasonable or not. For example, high school students in Taiwan need to take a general test to apply for universities. Since the higher scores a student takes, the better college he can get into. Many of them focus on how to perform great on the test instead of pay attention to the actual reason behind the answers.
To conclude, I think that formal education is important for students. Without it, many students can't even have the ability to think and discuss. Nevertheless, there are some issues with current education system that might cause students to lose their individual thinking.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, for example, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 409.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97555012225 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55709721786 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501222493888 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.3489849343 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5909090909 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63636363636 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0931100711572 0.243740707755 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.033378117778 0.0831039109588 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415997705127 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0656961956611 0.150359130593 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327811635159 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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