Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Whether the formal education which appear in lots of people life is tends to restrain our minds or set them free. I believed that the formal education would restrain our mind. Here are the reasons.
The formal education always teaches the knowledge with an inflexible ways. For example, in elementary school, the teachers no matter which subjects keeps telling us the knowledge that write on the text book. All we need to do is to rote all the information on the books rather than thinking and absorb the knowledge. We can score the A plus for having a excellent memory in each lines. Gradually, our mind restrained by the formal education and lost the ability of think outside the box.
Some people might claim that learning knowledges from formal education could broaden the horizons. However, acquiring the knowledges could not guarantee formal education would set minds free. If an outstanding business man having well perform in formal education, but he has a strict mind. When he facing the problem, he might have a chance that he can not solve it. Even if he has lots of knowledges, life is hard to predict, the text book doesn’t tell you how to address the difficulties. If one can’t flexible exert his mind and knowledge than he might be beaten by the adversity.
Students need to pay enormous effort on reading text books and doing their homework to become a good student. They keep sitting in front of the desk and focus on their academic which they don’t have any interest. To accomplish these tasks, students hardly have extra time to found a life out of study. Without study, students might be loss. They don’t have any time to seek the true meaning of the life. All they can do is keep learning from the formal education which won’t lead them to a free mind.
To conclude, those proclaims above let me believe formal education tends to restrain out minds rather than set them free.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'way'?
Suggestion: way
...eaches the knowledge with an inflexible ways. For example, in elementary school, the...
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Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'A' is left.
Suggestion: the; A
... and absorb the knowledge. We can score the A plus for having a excellent memory in e...
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Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...dge. We can score the A plus for having a excellent memory in each lines. Gradual...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'faces'.
Suggestion: faces
...tion, but he has a strict mind. When he facing the problem, he might have a chance tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 332.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78614457831 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41677219659 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539156626506 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 704.065955056 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.252743314 60.3974514979 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.6666666667 118.986275619 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8095238095 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.85714285714 5.21951772744 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404941640012 0.243740707755 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127457645903 0.0831039109588 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168947201027 0.0758088955206 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301064545551 0.150359130593 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.196725166955 0.0667264976115 295% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 48.8420337079 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 12.1743820225 56% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.7820224719 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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