Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free
The prompt suggests that formal education is deleterious for our mental and intellecutal development. In my opinion, I mostly agree with this notion and argue that formal education has a tendency to limit our growth.
To begin, formal education tries to generalize people rather than taking their individuality into action. Everyone is different. It is statistically highly improbable that formal education can cater to every single person, and this has the unintended consequence of limting a person's growth. The course contents and the tests are designed in such a way that a significant number of people might find these hard to navigate and have a hard time to find their true calling. For example, a student might be good at music, dance or arts. In my places, these subjects are considered niche and a greater value is placed on other "demanding" subjects such as mathematics or economics. Due to prevailing social bias towards these "demanding" subjects, a student wishing to pursue their subject choice of interest, will find it difficult to do so. This illustrates how formal education tends to restrain our growth.
Furthermore, formal education tends to be not conducive to our imagination. Many great scientist, both in our time and those who came before us, placed utmost importance on imagination. For example, the greatest scientist of our time, Albert Einstein, considered imagination to be a critical component for several of his key discoveries. Formal education, with its standardized tests, doesn't test the students for their novel thinking. The tests are a tool to evaluate how well the students have prepared on the classroom materials, not how well their thought processes have improved. In this manner, formal educations tends to deemphasize our intellectual growth.
In conclusion, formal education is a nifty tool to evaluate students of knowledge. But due to its nature and the aforementioned reasons, it doesn't bode well for our minds and spirits and ends up circumscribing our growth where its true objective should have been to set them free.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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...education, with its standardized tests, doesnt test the students for their novel think...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 333.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30630630631 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17676558583 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558558558559 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.1842792985 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1666666667 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94444444444 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323748989485 0.243740707755 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102288064919 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104507771787 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195730692918 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493659693536 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.