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Teachers’ salaries should be based on their students’ academic performance.

The collaboration between the teacher and the students plays an important role in bringing out the best from both parties. Not just in a classroom, but also elsewhere in our daily lives, we notice that a mentor-mentee relationship is one of the most crucial elements for an individual to grow. The prompt recommends that academic performance of the students should be the sole decider of teachers' salaries. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this notion and argue that teachers' salaries should not be tied to the academic performance of the students for three reasons.

To begin, A teacher who is overly focused on their students' academic performance will often fail to engage their students and capture their attention over the long run. The role of a teacher is not to increase the academic performance of the students, but to mould young minds to impart meaningful knowledge in a way that ignites the students' curiosity and helps the students to engage in their education in an enthusiastic way. Moreover, if academic performance is the sole concern of the teacher, students will also be solely concerned with performance on the test, overlooking the fundamentals and missing the opportunity to inculcate the fundamentals within them. The lessons learnt will be temporary and regurgitated at the exam hall, only to be forgotten afterwards.

Secondly, It is not guaranteed that despite the best efforts of the teacher, the students will be able to perform at the levels expected from them. Students' performance in class academics and at the tests depends on a multitude of factors such as their background, their inclination towards the topic being teached and their efforts towards academic tasks For example, studies have shown the, in USA, students in white neighborhoods perform better than their counterparts in black neighborhoods because historically, the blacks have been deprived of privileges that otherwise would be enjoyed. As a result, the blacks students have a starkly disparate upbringing and social surroundings that their white counterparts. Same can be argued for teachers as well. In addition, the situation is dire for a young and inexperienced teacher compared to an old and experienced teacher. A considerable amount of time has to be given to a new teacher for him/her to be accustomed to teaching his/her students in the class.

Thirdly, each student is different, and one cannot expect the same outcome from each of them given the input from the teacher is the same. A narrow focus on education, based solely on academic performance, will act as an impediment to a student's potential growth as an individual.

Some may argue that teachers focusing on their students' academics will incentivize both the teacher and the students to work hard. However, this is a temporary solution at best and cannot be generalized to everyone. The overarching principle of education is not that students achieve their best grades at the exams and be done with it, but rather education should act as a platform that the students can utilize to find their calling with the help of their teachers.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ful knowledge in a way that ignites the students curiosity and helps the students to eng...
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Line 3, column 406, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an enthusiastic way" with adverb for "enthusiastic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...e students to engage in their education in an enthusiastic way. Moreover, if academic performance is t...
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Line 5, column 389, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
...c tasks For example, studies have shown the, in USA, students in white neighborhoods...
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Line 7, column 236, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...rformance, will act as an impediment to a students potential growth as an individual. S...
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Line 9, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...al growth as an individual. Some may argue that teachers focusing on their student...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, as to, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2613.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 509.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13359528487 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94236971402 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467583497053 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 801.9 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.3009338019 60.3974514979 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.526315789 118.986275619 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7894736842 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57894736842 5.21951772744 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.596867663959 0.243740707755 245% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192079293581 0.0831039109588 231% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115158940193 0.0758088955206 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.336678391388 0.150359130593 224% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0949024005214 0.0667264976115 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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