Education is a crucial element in every individuals' life. Formal education, which is education acquired from established institutions like schools and colleges have always been the norm. From a tender age of three, toddlers are admitted in playschools, marking its first step into the array of educational institutions. Certainly, school shapes the minds of children, focusing not only on academics but also encouraging them towards sports and imparting to them good manners and values. However, some might argue that all formal education does is restrain the minds and spirits of individuals rather than set them free. I do not agree with this claim.
Formal education institutes possess defined curricula for school level children. It includes such subjects which will be needed by a person in the future. It teaches basic algebra which is needed in all walks of life irrespective of one's profession. Not all children like math but if such restraint was not posed to them in schools, many might have a hard time keeping their bank accounts in the future. The schools help children learn things they particularly may not be a fan of but which will certainly be of use in life.
In the college level, one specialises on the subjects one is interested in. College life, rather than binding spirits, makes one more curious about one's field of study and provides one with the resources to satiate one's curiosity. It also provides a college degree which is credible evidence of one's skills.
Nevertheless, there are many exemplary people such as Bill Gates and Mark Zuckerberg, who have foregone formal education yet have succeeded. In ancient times also, scholars rarely had any formal education but had made groundbreaking revelations. But successful hire mostly certifies graduates. The system of formal education came into being so that everyone had the chance to make it big. Thus all such instances, in turn, strengthen the claim that formal education is indeed necessary as very few people succeed with shear self-learning. Although people are capable of learning on their own, guidance from professionals is required eventually.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...Education is a crucial element in every individuals life. Formal education, which is educat...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'restrained'.
Suggestion: restrained
...argue that all formal education does is restrain the minds and spirits of individuals ra...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ed in all walks of life irrespective of ones profession. Not all children like math ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun might seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much might', 'a good deal of might'.
Suggestion: much might; a good deal of might
...raint was not posed to them in schools, many might have a hard time keeping their bank acc...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...g spirits, makes one more curious about ones field of study and provides one with th...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ge degree which is credible evidence of ones skills. Nevertheless, there are many...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...everyone had the chance to make it big. Thus all such instances, in turn, strengthen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, thus, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 344.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23255813953 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79187838395 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604651162791 0.4932671777 123% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7961638265 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243900680301 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674325026995 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117020244908 0.0758088955206 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138368497705 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127699883477 0.0667264976115 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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