Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
According to the author formal education restrains our mind and spirits rather than setting them free however, I don’t completely agree with the author’s opinion.There are several other factors which haunt’s our spirits and free thinking capacity.
Broadly the author here points out that our mind is restricted in certain areas of education and we lose our capacity to think and discover beyond the boundaries. however I would like to point the examples of certain scientists,sports personalities and artist’s who have succeded in their respective fields after receiving appropriate educational qualifications. free thinking and working on those ideas greatly depends on an individuals interest. The desire to do something beyond just achieving good educational qualifications helps.
however the authors argument is not completely wrong as we can see in our daily life a large amount of people restricting themselves to formal education only.They sort of form a boundry of there respective fields and than try to be within it, They don’t even get the idea of exploiting other fields. other factor which hinders free thinking and spirits is the derth of opportunities to exploit beyond just formal education.Because of certain loopholes and inefficient education system many students are just restricted to formal education.
Finally I would to conclude that eventhough it is true that formal education combined with certain other factors can restrict mind and spirits of the students it is not the only factor which is responsible and since education is must for every individual efforts should be made in motivating students to explore their areas of interests beyond education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, so, sort of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 2235.4752809 65% => OK
No of words: 261.0 442.535393258 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59003831418 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15562775434 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 215.323595506 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567049808429 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 704.065955056 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.4463640611 60.3974514979 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 182.375 118.986275619 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.625 23.4991977007 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341210788741 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137488807772 0.0831039109588 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124972599921 0.0758088955206 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219804314777 0.150359130593 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132940665047 0.0667264976115 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.2 14.1392134831 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 48.8420337079 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 12.1743820225 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.73 12.1639044944 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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