Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.
Leaders of in any society are chosen to run the society well and take those decisions that are beneficial to people in it. As, in most of the democratic society leaders are chosen by people, it may be tempting to give sole power to leaders to take decision for their country, but this might bring pernicious consequences, especially when leaders are not well-equipped, or are biased to a particular group of people.
When the government officials are not well- equipped to run a country, they might take decisions solely based on whim, rather than predicating it on any rational reasoning. There are many examples in the history where the government officials have taken decisions without inquiring its general public, and have brought a worst consequence for their country. In Venezuela, for instance, Juan Guiado an opposition party member appointed himself as a president citing- without concrete evidence- Nicholas Maduro, the current president, as a leader chosen by a biased election. There was no public involved in this decision, but these activities of major leaders of the country has thrown the country into chaos; inflation is all time high, crime rates are increasing, and there is no any hint of subsiding of this chaotic situation. Had the decision of resolving the issue been given to public rather than appointing oneself as a leader, they would have provided a more peaceful solution to the problem.
Secondly, the decision of leaders of a country may be fully biased while taking decision that may benefit one group of people while disregarding- sometimes even harming- the other group. Several times in different government, for instance, the officials form policy in such a way that richer population get to escape tax through some loopholes created by the policy while the poorer population are forced to pay taxes. This has widened the gap between rich and poor at a dramatic rate all over the world. Oxfam International, for example, has reported that the disparity between rich and poor is so high that half of the world’s wealth is accumulated among the 41 richest people in the planet. Though leaders might take such decisions citing some inherent benefit but in fact most of them act out of bias.
The proponent of the argument, however, might claim that leaders of the society are chosen by people and they best represent the sentiment of people. So, a decision taken by they reflect the decisions that people actually want. However, have we not seen many such instances where leaders betray their words after ascending into power? Of course, we have. So, it is always judicious to consult general population before taking any decision who always provide decision that are best for the country and for themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...e taken decisions without inquiring its general public, and have brought a worst consequence f...
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Line 3, column 320, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ng its general public, and have brought a worst consequence for their country. In...
^
Line 3, column 645, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n this decision, but these activities of major leaders of the country has thrown ...
^^
Line 3, column 780, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...rime rates are increasing, and there is no any hint of subsiding of this chaotic s...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in fact, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2302.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 455.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05934065934 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6521836305 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516483516484 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1101970397 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.411764706 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7647058824 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 5.21951772744 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108250889519 0.243740707755 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407120416309 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043676582887 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0676276324806 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357894304835 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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