Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible
The rift between rich and poor is growing at an astronomical pace. According to latest data provided by Oxfam, a UK based organization, world’s top 41 richest people accumulate nearly half of the planet’s wealth, and most of these richest people belong to giant corporation. This type of growing gap among rich and poor have made poor more dependent on richer population, and it is harder for them to make by without support from these corporations (see developing countries where people can’t join hands to mouth without some form of aid).
Though these corporations are not legally required to work for the betterment of society and people residing there, it is their moral obligation to do so. Moreover, working for the betterment of society can help them in creating conducive social environment, which is the crux of running corporation. Many poor population in societies, for instance, may be afflicted with various disease that they are not able to afford a cure. If giant corporation aid in bringing proper health care plan in the society then it would be helpful for people, and furthermore would help in creating healthy manpower, a crucial factor to run corporations. A healthy society is destined to be happy and peaceful, and corporation can work well in such peaceful milieu.
In addition to the betterment of society, the corporations should also take responsibility of the stewardship of natural environment in which they operate in; it is their moral study to do so as they mostly have huge amount of environmental footprint. Factories (goods), for instance, produce huge amount of greenhouse gases that are causing climate change at an unprecedented rate. In addition, solid waste produce by these corporations, without proper method to be re-cycled or re-use, are being stashed or burnt in many of neighboring environments, causing a great damage to it. In Indonesia, for example, tofu producers are incinerating huge amount of plastic waste to produce tofu (famous food in Indonesia), but the side effects of these burning are being tangible at accelerating pace as more and more people are suffering from breathing problems, so do animals residing nearby. Therefore, it is the moral duty of corporations to act to mitigate the damage caused by their activities. Such activities not only create positive image in public about the corporation, it also helps them to amass higher profit as their activity for environmental protection can elicit more costumers for their product: the costumer would buy goods(or use service) of those corporations that are also working for good cause.
Finally, though giant corporations are only obliged to act within the legal framework (that doesn’t include society welfare or environmental action), it is their moral obligation move outside the framework. They have extracted benefits from society exploiting natural environment and so it is mandatory to compensate for both.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the latest'.
Suggestion: to the latest
...wing at an astronomical pace. According to latest data provided by Oxfam, a UK based orga...
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Line 1, column 136, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vided by Oxfam, a UK based organization, world's top 41 richest people accum...
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Line 5, column 559, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'great damage'.
Suggestion: great damage
...ny of neighboring environments, causing a great damage to it. In Indonesia, for example, tofu ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2479.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 470.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27446808511 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99498675736 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536170212766 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 795.6 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.3730569687 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.9375 118.986275619 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.375 23.4991977007 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 5.21951772744 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205816828434 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678376982068 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548868931836 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123032173396 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263818355017 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.1392134831 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.8420337079 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.