On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Given the evidence from Seaville, the neighbouring island, it may seem plausible that reducing number of mopeds in Balmer will reduce number of accidents in the city. Nonetheless, the above argument is based on many vague assumptions, not corroborated by any tangible facts that make the conclusion very much arguable.
Firstly, the above statement assumes that increasing number of causalities in summer is due to rise in number of mopeds in the town. However, the argument doesn’t provide any concrete evidence to bolster the assertion. The increasing in number of accidents from moped may be due to non-moped factors such as ailing road condition, or may be due to lack of awareness among pedestrian about traffic rules of the city. Had these been real factors to move up the number of casualties, decreasing number of mopeds alone would not have any significant effect on reducing the number of accidents.
Secondly, the argument also assumes that in Seaville, the neighboring island, number of moped related accident dwindled after introducing the law to reduce number of rented moped. Even if the increase in number of accidents was due to increasing number of moped, one cannot plainly assure that decrease in number of moped will have same effect (decrease in accidents) in Balmer as it was in Seavile, because road condition, driving adeptness of drivers in two cities and other factors may differ between two cities. So, how can we solely come up to the conclusion that the given solution can have similar effects on two cities without taking into account other affecting factors? Obviously not.
Similarly, the argument also mentions exact number of vehicles (25 to 50) that should be decreased in the city to bring down the number of moped-related accidents. But, it doesn’t provide any study or findings that cogently support this facts; it just seems that the author has made a rough conjecture without predicating the conclusion on anything. So, it would be best if the argument mentions any facts or studies that might support this claim.
Finally, although it may seem worthy to pass the policy that would effectively dwindle the number of rented moped in the city to bring down number of casualties, the facts that seem to support this argument doesn’t seem to be have been based on any tangible facts or study. So, it would be best for the council to evaluate these assumptions through detailed studies and then only promulgate an effective decision.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 412 350
No. of Characters: 2013 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.505 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.886 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.574 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.832 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.867 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... from Seaville, the neighbouring island, it may seem plausible that reducing num...
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Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd, it may seem plausible that reducing number of mopeds in Balmer will reduce n...
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Line 3, column 377, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...or may be due to lack of awareness among pedestrian about traffic rules of the ci...
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Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'effected'.
Suggestion: effected
...rease in number of moped will have same effect decrease in accidents in Balmer as it w...
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Line 7, column 236, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...study or findings that cogently support this facts; it just seems that the author ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09290953545 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70456763035 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471882640587 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.0811271339 57.8364921388 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.785714286 119.503703932 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2142857143 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 5.70786347227 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221630177365 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825737399667 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875249799711 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135917677752 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646324248887 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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