“Governments are justified in circumventing civil laws when doing so is vital to the protection of national security.”
Write an essay in which you take a position on the statement above. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true.
A government’s role is to represent the will of the people and to keep the peace amongst them. There is a high degree of complexity in the ways and means to performing this function. Due to the tendency of bias in circumventing civil laws to detect and and prosecute criminals, the best solution is for governments to respect the rights in the constitution and that the citizens have elected to put in place. This clear when examining even the most quotidian examples of governments not respecting the will of the people.
Unlawful imprisonment without a fair trial is a notorious injustice, with numerous examples of in recent history. The US government was responsible for such activities during the Red Scare in post-WWII days. Artists and liberals with fringe beliefs were black-listed from creative bodies due to potential involvement with communist activities. Suspicion without proof was enough to ruin the careers and lives of many. Trial by media and association was the only trial some received. In a more extreme examples, racial profiling of muslim Americans has perniciously allowed a wave of violence and wrongful imprisonment. Without adequate legal representation “justice” was implemented unevenly.
Trespassing the citizens’ right to privacy is a second common occurrence corroborated by “national security.” The Wikileaks scandal of a decade ago exposed a vast network of surveillance put in place by the government without just cause. As citizens were not informed of such activities - although paid for with tax dollars - no balancing, monitoring body was put in place to temper the scope of such activities. Such actions have resulted in a wave of fear that has spread to mistrust of even private entities such as Google and Amazon, in terms of the data which is collected and how it is used. Ultimately, the government sets precedent for what is appropriate and necessary for security, and thus the erosion of laws occur when the government is allowed exception.
In summation, the ends do not justify the means when it comes to protecting a country as a whole when it compromises the rights of individuals. If rights were perfectly delineated, and it were possible to perfect execute every activity, perhaps exceptions to civil laws would be possible. However, the most prudent method of preventing infringement on true democracy is for national bodies to follow the laws that have been put in place.
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...justice' was implemented unevenly. Trespassing the citizens' right to ...
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...orated by 'national security.' The Wikileaks scandal of a decade ago ex...
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...en the government is allowed exception. In summation, the ends do not justify th...
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...w the laws that have been put in place.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, thus, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 33.0505617978 33% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2080.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27918781726 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21038959742 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558375634518 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.249163128 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.555555556 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.11111111111 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16336888315 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464698797162 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486801597672 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981872637595 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323215672036 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.