Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The issue is about the amount of investment in the arts as in comparison to military. It will be noted that different countries have different state of security, and therefore, need to address this issue in a different way.
First, as an artist who happens to be from Israel, I feel that I gained experties in this issue from a myriad angles, which will allow me to examine the pros and the cons of the main statement that the claim represents. For Israel, it will not be possible to apprise the art budget to the military one without risking the country on many fronts. Naturaly as a state surrounded by enemies, who claim they want to erradicate Israel, the budget of Israel's security office is estimable and concludes to 50 billions sheckels annualy, and our art budget is significantly lower and is below 10 billions. comparing the latter with the first will induce debt and financial risk upon the state of Israel and its citizens. So, in the case of Israel it is not at all recommended that the art budget will be compared to the military budget.
Secondly, In some other region of the world military is a less of an issue. In those reigons it is probably much more plausible that art budget might be as big or even surpass the military budget. For example, I am a citizen of another country, Austria. In Austria the military budget is neglible, since they have de facto no army since world war two. Yet, Austria art budget is tremendous. Vienna , is one of the art centers of the world. It is where many great musicians and artist prolifirated an estimable career. We still listen to music of Mozart and his contemporaries. Since Austria has no enemies on its borders, Austria can invest more to maintain its rich cultural herritage.
Thirdly, there also the middle case, I also have family in Canada. Canda do have a border with Russia (A marine border), so it does need to protect itself from hostility acts. Canada also borders with USA which is the state with the strongest army according to international press. Nevertheless, Canada does not have the kind of immediate threats that Israel experiences on daily basis. So Canada budget could be much more balanced between art and military. So yet we see, different country, different issue. Canada parameters are indeed differs from Israel and Austria.
To conclude, every different country is located in a different reigon and has different security needs. Without getting into the nuance of the cultural proper art budgeting, it is already shown that different goverments should invest in the arts in proportion to their security status and it will be implausible to compare the arts budget to the militart budget regardless of considering the security state. All the examples which were base on my personal experience have been given to show the proper cirucmstances where a larger arts budget could be deployed and the conditions that would not allow for such deployment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, thirdly, for example, i feel, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2441.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 504.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84325396825 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64020627 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494047619048 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 779.4 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.3845234812 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8846153846 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42307692308 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104138697385 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0322530775717 0.0831039109588 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314940625575 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0613697419935 0.150359130593 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0123721242223 0.0667264976115 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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