Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Military in the United States of America has the highest investment compared to any other sector. Well, it is quite justifiable as the country has a long coastline, population of millions and a large landmass to protect from any enemy or potential anti-national forces. Thousands of teens covet to be an esteemed officer serving for the military of the nation, as they are in a way protecting their own country from any anti- nation forces. Additionally, with the increase of terror in this century and constant threat from terrorists forces putting millions of lives in jeopardy, certainly justifies the huge amount of investment made in the military sector of the country.
On the contrary, arts is not a sector that justifiably requires such an enormous amount of investment as not so much of human capital is required in this field and moreover, it is not applicable to each and every citizen of the country. Government can rightly impart a huge percentage of taxes paid by every citizen of the country to the maintenance of the military department, but it would not be right on the part of the citizens if the same percentage of their taxes paid went to develop arts or maintain the existing arts.
Art is not considered important by most of the citizens of the nation, and by the decision makers in the government mainly because it is quite neglected as compared to any other sector. People do not realize that the art needs to be preserved and does require a lot of finance so that the future generation can be inspired by the art work and help them achieve new horizons in the field of art. Many fail to realize that the artifacts that are preserved in the public museum as well as the private ones, needs to be safeguarded and certainly requires a lot of money. Moreover, tourism industry of the country is mainly based on many of the art works. So it definitely justifiable, that a part of the investment by the government needs to be in the field of art, as it has been contributing equally in the economy of the country.
Art work needs to be preserved and also new art needs to be nurtured. The United States has always been the fore bearer in any industry. Additionally, it has been the home of renowned artists for centuries together. In order for the art to be preserved and fostering the younger generation to tread the same path of the great artists be it in the field of literature, painting, or any other genre of art, the government needs to play a vital role in fostering the art industry, helping to include various art schools and making it mandatory to pursue art as a subject at school-level in order to pursue the teens to take up art as a career. Well, it is not expected from the government that they increase the investment in the field of art to as high as the military sector, because by doing so the investment in some other sector would be compromised. In fact, they should increase the investment in arts to a higher level, where neither other sectors suffer nor the artifacts no longer cease to exist, helping the people's interest to be regained.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun fail seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much fail', 'a good deal of fail'.
Suggestion: Much fail; A good deal of fail
...hieve new horizons in the field of art. Many fail to realize that the artifacts that are ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'well', 'in fact', 'as well as', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.232993197279 0.240241500013 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.159863945578 0.157235817809 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0799319727891 0.0880659088768 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0578231292517 0.0497285424764 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0272108843537 0.0444667217837 61% => OK
Prepositions: 0.149659863946 0.12292977631 122% => OK
Participles: 0.0561224489796 0.0406280797675 138% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.70072006311 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0408163265306 0.030933414821 132% => OK
Particles: 0.00170068027211 0.0016655270985 102% => OK
Determiners: 0.137755102041 0.0997080785238 138% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00850340136054 0.0249443105267 34% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00510204081633 0.0148568991511 34% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3090.0 2732.02544248 113% => OK
No of words: 548.0 452.878318584 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63868613139 6.0361032391 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.58838876751 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.32299270073 0.366273622748 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.260948905109 0.280924506359 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175182481752 0.200843997647 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.11496350365 0.132149295362 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70072006311 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 219.290929204 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.410583941606 0.48968727796 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.759378614 55.4138127331 86% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6194690265 82% => OK
Sentence length: 32.2352941176 23.380412469 138% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.9994888315 59.4972553346 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 181.764705882 141.124799967 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2352941176 23.380412469 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.529411764706 0.674092028746 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 58.3301846286 51.4728631049 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.79166666667 1.64882698954 109% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439120697094 0.391690518653 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.197388124662 0.123202303941 160% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0756913915019 0.077325440228 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.65759738525 0.547984918172 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.16121264208 0.149214159877 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.243780492455 0.161403998019 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888888321164 0.0892212321368 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.630316822178 0.385218514788 164% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.095879576576 0.0692045440612 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.357385921833 0.275328986314 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537957213701 0.0653680567796 82% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.4325221239 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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