Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The recommendation made that governments should invest as much in the artes as in military does not seem to be practical in real sense. While it is true that investing in arts will boost the morale of the artists, tourism, etc, certain other factors and problems in the country that are vital need to be addressed first.
Consider the example of a developing country like India. India is one of the top arms importers in the world. This like any other issue in India is a necessity to address treats to the country like cross-border terrorism and to balance the domination of the militarist powerful neighbouring countries. Likewise therre are several other problems in India like poverty, poor infrastructure, low literacy rates, etc. These issues are more vital to the progress of citizens and the country than the artistic influence or advancement. While on one hand, artistic advancement would merely enhance tourism and aesthetics, on the other hand, addressing and ameliorating issues like poverty, illiteracy, etc would serve to improve the quality of life and the standard of leaving of the citizens thus would also increase the tax collections and productivity of the country which is more beneficial. In a nutshell, arts not being vital to life need not be prioritized over other fundamental issues.
Another example where investments in art are not a priority are in countries like Indonesia. Indonesia has a high rate of people affected by HIV-AIDS. This is a major cause of concern for their government since the disease as no solid cure as of now. The affected person can live a long enough life provided he/she receives medication at the right times. It is thus the government's priority to procure such medicines and make them available at subsidized rates so that everyone can afford them. In case the government would divert those funds and invest in arts as much as in military, which ususally is a significant amount, these vital drugs would not be available to everyone and thus would be a grave concern with grave consequences for the country.
Thus having looked at the above mentioned examples, it can be reasonably said that arts can not be prioritized over the fundamental and a vital issues like healthcare, poverty, sanitation, etc. While an affluent and advanced military is essential in protecting the integrity, sovereignity and independence of the nation, within the nation, addressing and investing in the vital issues is more important than investing in arts. Only when these vital issues are addressed, then other less crucial areas like arts, sports, etc should be invested in.
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Suggestion: Likewise,
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'if', 'likewise', 'look', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'while', 'it is true', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.247916666667 0.240241500013 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.13125 0.157235817809 83% => OK
Adjectives: 0.108333333333 0.0880659088768 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.05 0.0497285424764 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0166666666667 0.0444667217837 37% => OK
Prepositions: 0.1375 0.12292977631 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0333333333333 0.0406280797675 82% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.85181977748 2.79330140395 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0208333333333 0.030933414821 67% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.108333333333 0.0997080785238 109% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0291666666667 0.0249443105267 117% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0104166666667 0.0148568991511 70% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2624.0 2732.02544248 96% => OK
No of words: 434.0 452.878318584 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.04608294931 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.58838876751 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.341013824885 0.366273622748 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.276497695853 0.280924506359 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.21198156682 0.200843997647 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.135944700461 0.132149295362 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85181977748 2.79330140395 102% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 219.290929204 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511520737327 0.48968727796 104% => OK
Word variations: 58.0009597591 55.4138127331 105% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.1111111111 23.380412469 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.3462632869 59.4972553346 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.777777778 141.124799967 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1111111111 23.380412469 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.611111111111 0.674092028746 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 51.7608806964 51.4728631049 101% => OK
Elegance: 2.11578947368 1.64882698954 128% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.47164654183 0.391690518653 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.127830596133 0.123202303941 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0786197912781 0.077325440228 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.514020864419 0.547984918172 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.192986586151 0.149214159877 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192767688318 0.161403998019 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120365299092 0.0892212321368 135% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.406813366699 0.385218514788 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0359051553095 0.0692045440612 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.367354960945 0.275328986314 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488862109702 0.0653680567796 75% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.