Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
It is a highly subjective perception that dreams are inherently selfish. While some may perceive a certain dream as selfish, others may see it otherwise. Thus I personally feel that the claim is based on a reason that lacks a holistic approach. So I disagree with the claim and the reason on which it is based upon.
Furthermore, the advice to "follow your dreams" is based on various reasons like the individual's passion and thus the capability to work for it thus ultimately making him capable in that field. Consider the example of Steve Jobs. He was admitted in one of the prestigious institutes in the country. So naturally as per his foster parents, the worthy goal for him would be to for him to study sincerely, finish college and then get a decent job and earn money. But instead he chose to follow his dreams and passions. His dream and passion was innovation and he strived hard to pursue that which is what made him good at it. It can be hardly said that his dream was selfish since the outcomes that came of him pursuing his dream revolutionalized the technology present at that time which benefitted not just him but everyone. His legacy born out of his dreams, still lives on to be the most valued technology company in the world.
Another fact is that a person's dream can also be tantamount to a worthy goal. For example, one of my cousins has recently started a company that provides high quality seeds to farmers that reap export quality crops which he himself buys at a decent rate from the farmers and then exports a part of it and sells a part of it domestically. He is from a middle class background and his dream from the beginning was to be an entrepreneur. He followed this dream and created a business model which was not only beneficial for him but also for the farmers. Earlier they were neither able to procure good quality seeds nor able to sell their harvest at a decent price. Thus it can be seen that while he followed his dream, in its course he also achieved goals which were not only worthy and much needed in that scenario, but also beneficial for him as well as the farmers.
Thus from the above examples it can be understood that people's dreams are not inherently selfish and not just themselves, but other people can also benefit from them. Worthy goals can be set in the course of following one's dreams that are beneficial to others too and not just themselves. Also when an individual follows their dreams, he is passionate about it thus something of value can come out of it whereas if they weren't passionate about it then the outcome would be lacklustre which won't be beneficial to anyone. Thus broadly speaking, the advice to "follow one's dreams" is a good one and valid.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...s selfish, others may see it otherwise. Thus I personally feel that the claim is bas...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...s; is based on various reasons like the individuals passion and thus the capability to work...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...o sell their harvest at a decent price. Thus it can be seen that while he followed h...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...cial for him as well as the farmers. Thus from the above examples it can be under...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... to others too and not just themselves. Also when an individual follows their dreams...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...alue can come out of it whereas if they werent passionate about it then the outcome wo...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus', 'well', 'whereas', 'while', 'as to', 'broadly speaking', 'for example', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.194756554307 0.240241500013 81% => OK
Verbs: 0.151685393258 0.157235817809 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0730337078652 0.0880659088768 83% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0880149812734 0.0497285424764 177% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0973782771536 0.0444667217837 219% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.114232209738 0.12292977631 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0243445692884 0.0406280797675 60% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59549728441 2.79330140395 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0280898876404 0.030933414821 91% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0861423220974 0.0997080785238 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0205992509363 0.0249443105267 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0243445692884 0.0148568991511 164% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2742.0 2732.02544248 100% => OK
No of words: 489.0 452.878318584 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60736196319 6.0361032391 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.298568507157 0.366273622748 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.21881390593 0.280924506359 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.137014314928 0.200843997647 68% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0940695296524 0.132149295362 71% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59549728441 2.79330140395 93% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 219.290929204 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462167689162 0.48968727796 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.7168282046 55.4138127331 95% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2272727273 23.380412469 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4243943951 59.4972553346 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.636363636 141.124799967 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2272727273 23.380412469 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.727272727273 0.674092028746 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.21349557522 134% => OK
Readability: 44.1086633203 51.4728631049 86% => OK
Elegance: 0.988888888889 1.64882698954 60% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283771404223 0.391690518653 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.127138016614 0.123202303941 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.100613050962 0.077325440228 130% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.484017296058 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.111880580368 0.149214159877 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115566031097 0.161403998019 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688081369039 0.0892212321368 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.392494178354 0.385218514788 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.090208926995 0.0692045440612 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205220610361 0.275328986314 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599056547429 0.0653680567796 92% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.4325221239 153% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.