Governments should provide funding for artists so that the arts can flourish and be available to all people.
us">While arts indeed have their benefits, when compared to other more practical fields like science, the value of arts are rather dwarfed in this world fraught with pragmatic concerns. I do not believe that it behooves the governments to support the development of arts monetarily because such support may pay little dividend in actually developing the arts, and the governments should prioritize their more pressing concerns.
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us">Above all else, we have to accede to the fact that arts possess their benefits, and it is indubitably a fallacy to dismiss arts as an amalgamation of everything whimsical, impractical and haphazard. practically, arts can bring to fore a wealth of practical benefits; great literature works that depict the lives of the impecunious or hapless can spur people to extend a helping hand to the less fortunate, inculcating in them moral values; stunning music can imbue us with euphoria; painting cannot just captivate human minds, it has also been scientifically proven to have therapeutic effects on those emotionally impaired individuals. when given monetary support, more people may pursue a career in arts and be goaded to produce works of high quality. therefore, it will be helpful if the governments are willing to develop arts.
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us">On the flipside, arts may not flourish just because of monetary support. More often than not, the top-down monetary support, after weak implementation plan and other botched handling of financial matters, usually becomes watered-down, hardly efficacious in the end. furthermore, arts may not rely on money to flourish; those with an ardent passion in their profession as artists may not improve their quality of work just because of the monetary gain, and some people without a genuine interest may fall prey to the lure of money, producing works simply for the sake of monetary interests. it is commonsensical that great works of arts usually require people to have a peaceful mind devoid of worldly concerns.
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us">furthermore, governments should focus on dealing with issues that are more practical in cases of economic doldrum or underdevelopment of economy. In countries like Somali, where children are still abducted as child soldiers and desensitized into atrocious killers, it is palpable that they should focus on weeding out the social upheaval and poverty. In other poor places like the underdeveloped regions of China, governments should focus on empowering people to climb out their quicksand of poverty characterized by the most dilapidated living environment and a dearth of educational resources. therefore, under these situations, it will then be preposterous for the government to heedlessly spend money on the development of arts, blinking those more pressing concerns.
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us">On the whole, arts can instill in us positivity. However, in view of a limited budget, governments should tread on the side of caution and restriction in husbanding its resources and allocating the monetary support to the suitable fields.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, while, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2645.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 474.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58016877637 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24733712741 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552742616034 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 810.0 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.1259318606 60.3974514979 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.3125 118.986275619 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.625 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185009293012 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645637104441 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0260697784767 0.0758088955206 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114979238079 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205483604187 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 14.1392134831 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.8420337079 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.68 12.1639044944 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 100.480337079 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.7820224719 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.