The increasingly rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Due to the hectic pace of our everyday lives, we our mental and physical health may be in danger. Nevertheless, because of the unprecedented process in technology, which by the way is one of the outcomes of our speedy lives, our lives have become more comfortable.
First of all, because we are always in a rush to finish our tasks in our vocations, study for numerous exams, have business meetings, we do not have enough time to look for ourselves and our families. Since our minds are always in a rush we can never relax and have some sort of quality time. With the lack of this healing time, our minds cannot relieve the stress resulting from so much work. In addition, it may also feel as if you are excluded from the family, because you cannot participate in family activities such as attending in new year's family gatherings. The huge increase in the number of people visiting psychologists show that people in the modern society are stressed by trying to catch up with the fleeting change of society. Consequently, it could be argued that a speedy pace of a community will result in bad mental health conditions.
Next, the effort to complete everything in a short time is detrimental to human's physical health as well. People nowadays want to save their meal time so they consume fast-food or sometimes even starve to get their work finished in a short time. Although it is widely known that fast-food or starving is derogatory to one's health, people can't resist the urge to complete their jobs in a hurry. For instance, Subways in Korea has been booming with customers who want to finish their meal fast and quick. Hence, all the rush that has been injected into our culture has sacrificed people's healthy diet to obtain the advance of the society.
On the other hand, because of all the rush, technology has been able to develop in an unprecedented pace. Research centers, universities and corporations are all in a hurry to develop new technology and make some sort of profit. And with this technology development we humans are in favor of great comfort. Smartphones for example, has let us to use navigation as long as you possess a phone, which is convenient when you are lost in a foreign city. In addition, we can use check our email without the need to carry heavy laptops everywhere we go. Therefore, although the fast change has somehow abated the health of our minds and bodies, it has also helped us to utilize all the technology that makes our lives simpler.
In conclusion, within the bustling society our soundness may be in great danger. Nevertheless, the quick change has led us to take advantage of modern technology that makes our lives easier.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 543, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...ily activities such as attending in new years family gatherings. The huge increase in...
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Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... fast-food or starving is derogatory to ones health, people cant resist the urge to ...
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Line 5, column 340, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ng is derogatory to ones health, people cant resist the urge to complete their jobs ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, hence, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, sort of, such as, by the way, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2220.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 467.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75374732334 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63299372085 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507494646681 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.065030513 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.714285714 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2380952381 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52380952381 5.21951772744 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103592127337 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0328300747686 0.0831039109588 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453156021647 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0560391792328 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389535501238 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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