An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The above passage states that that a new breed of millet high in vitamin A was developed by an international development organization in response to the vitamin A deficiency amongst the people in Tagus. The new bread millet, even though is expensive, can play a major role in helping the improvised people if Tagus. Regardless of the advantages it can produce, it can also bring problem to the families because it is a staple food in Tagus.
Firstly, the new bread millet which has been developed by the organization might produce vitamin A, but it is a scientifically modified product, and it could cause side effects to the people of Tagus. The safety of the product during consumption has not been mentioned by the passage and could cause fatal diseases to the farmer such as cancer and many farmers will not have the money for such treatment.
Furthermore, the farmers were promised subsidies to buy the new bread millet. But if the people living Tagus are not willing to buy the new product and are interested only in the natural product, then all the investment in the growth of the new plant might get wasted. This will cause the farmers to not only loose crops but also their investment in the crops.
Finally, we can come to the conclusion by saying that newly generated crops might help in providing vitamin A to the improvised people in Tagus. But the scientifically modified product might produce dangerous diseases that could be fatal to the people of Tagus. If more information were provided regarding the new food product, then it would be easy to convince the people of Tagus to opt for the new product.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 26, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
The above passage states that that a new breed of millet high in vitamin A...
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Line 7, column 411, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le of Tagus to opt for the new product.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, regarding, so, then, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1347.0 2235.4752809 60% => OK
No of words: 282.0 442.535393258 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77659574468 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66648039564 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 215.323595506 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460992907801 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 424.8 704.065955056 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2801001888 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.454545455 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6363636364 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 5.21951772744 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384976228171 0.243740707755 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154971996235 0.0831039109588 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120856598975 0.0758088955206 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236350261169 0.150359130593 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712794399384 0.0667264976115 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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