It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or
might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
How a person likes to define himself may vary from man to man- some may prioritize the social establishment they have, while some would like to define themselves by their personal achievements, individual perseverance and motivation of their family members. Therefore, identification through social groups, while being an important one, is definitely not the primary case of consideration.
The people we mix with, social groups we interact with play vital roles in developing our characters. A teenage guy who mixes with meritorious students might feel the necessity to go through his text books or his homework to at least save his reputation among his friends and thus becoming a regular student at least, if not a meritorious one. On the other hand, the student who is constantly mixing with drop outs and notorious, careless boys who hardly care about their life, may become reluctant about life goals soon or frustration may get into his way when trying to focus on his career. Thus or social groups can define and design ourselves.
However, examples of growing up on a poor social background and becoming a billionaire through diligence and personal struggle are not rare. A person, no matter how his/her surroundings are, if focused enough, can overcome all sorts of negative influence and achieve his life goals and be recognized for his own doings, not necessarily which group he belongs to or what social background he has. If such was the scenario, we would have never seen a Nelson Mandela or Martin Luther King- born during a reign of racism, they would have also been one of the many oppressed people. But they raised their voice, no matter what was going on their surroundings, they made it to the top, ended up as great leaders and torch-bearer against racism and human rights.
To conclude, it is more important to look into one's own self, nourish it, polish it to the pinnacle of self development and thus make himself known to others than to think about what kind of social group he seems to be intermingled.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 594, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...way when trying to focus on his career. Thus or social groups can define and design ...
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Line 7, column 234, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cial group he seems to be intermingled.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, while, at least, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 344.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93313953488 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72638931345 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622093023256 0.4932671777 126% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.3764620234 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.272727273 118.986275619 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2727272727 23.4991977007 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136486395515 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626080115507 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610697822165 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0745381561261 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294257265236 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.1392134831 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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