It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing an | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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“It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.”

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Society is a form of human interactions, while also a platform to converge intelligence of cognition and ideas of an individual. Some may argue that social groups that we participate in have the priority to define ourselves; however I take a more equilibrium stance, that we excavate our personality also by our hobby, ideology, and the conversation with ourselves.

The importance of social group was never been understated. According to Maslow, he put it as the third most important need for humans, following food and security, manifesting the role it plays in our daily lives. In addition, we all learn by exchanging thoughts with our group, and by finding a group that fits and being a part of the group surely aid to know ourselves. For instance, since elementary school, we start to find friends that we feel comfortable chatting with; later, we may join clubs or teams due to the same interest and talent that the group share. As we grow up, we study with peers that study the same major, and even furthermore, join companies not just because salary, but also the same expertise we share. With this perspective, social groups surely plays a major role in identifying ourselves.

However, this is not the only source that inform our personality to us. It has been widely proven, that individual activities can also help us to ponder who are we, and how do we think. Since the 21 century, many people started to participate in yoga or meditation, which often does not require a group of people to complete. When sharing their experiences and its benefits, the most common advantages that mentioned wre the opportunity to relax, slow down living pace, and revise themselves. Indeed, by meditating without disturbance, we are more likely to examine ourselves and unveil our personality, which could not be done by just joining a social group or having interactions with others. Moreover, many people have the habit of writing dairies, which has the same function as mentioned above. The words written everyday are precious gifts for ourselves, to put our personality under a microscope and analyzing it with a more objective perspective. Individual thinking can help us to identify ourselves without a doubt.

By how to define ourselves is a long-disputed issue. Although some may assert that social group is the primary source to discover personality effectively, I took a more balanced point of view by approbating the importance of self-thinking. Only by both measures can we learn about us with a more comprehensive way, and a more complete personality.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...on and ideas of an individual. Some may argue that social groups that we participate ...
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Line 5, column 819, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...n as mentioned above. The words written everyday are precious gifts for ourselves, to pu...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, third, while, for instance, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 426.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03990610329 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93792542549 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542253521127 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8920970305 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4210526316 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234645849505 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722213817345 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459634996017 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14277900446 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033268229524 0.0667264976115 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, third, while, for instance, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this: