It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves

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It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.

I agree that most of the time, we can define who we are by our identification with social groups. However, slightly different from the statement, I think that there are still some innate features that we can't change.

We can define what culture we are from by the identification with a certain group. By adopting different lifestyles, we are not limited to the culture where we are born. For example, many young students in Taiwan love animations from Japan. They not only learn how the speak Japanese but also love many traditions of Japan such as eating sushi or ramen. Therefore, they are already Japanese in their point of view. For another example, many children are raised by their grandparents in rural areas in Taiwan before entering elementary schools. When they are in such rural areas, they would proudly think of themselves as kids from the countryside. But when they move back the cities, they would not say that they are from such a minor city.

In this open society, whether we are male or female is defined by how we look at ourselves. The gender is now a spectrum rather than only two different states. And we can easily choose how we want to look like without the being restricted by the physical body. For example, men can think of themselves as beautiful ladies and dress even more beautiful than women without being criticized.

However, there are some features that we can't modify even if we think of ourselves as the other types. Race is one of the characteristics that people can't change since it is innate. Even if we think that we are from another race, the reality is not changeable. For example, even people in Taiwan consider themselves as Americans and have completely the same lifestyle as a real American. The truth is that the forebear of themselves are still from Taiwan.

I think that there are some features that we can change by identification with a certain groups. Nevertheless, some born characteristics are grounded truth that can't be modified.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ons from Japan. They not only learn how the speak Japanese but also love many traditions ...
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...owever, there are some features that we cant modify even if we think of ourselves as...
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...characteristics are grounded truth that cant be modified.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, for example, i think, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 343.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8250728863 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66778664216 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481049562682 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.0558178009 60.3974514979 33% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.8095238095 118.986275619 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52380952381 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232281103838 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762844730274 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117583964143 0.0758088955206 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145918258218 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797548141092 0.0667264976115 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 14.1392134831 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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