The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Nowadays, increasing advancements in technology and continuous innovations in different fields make humans' life considerably different from the one our ancestors had. Modern technologies and numerous high-tech devices and tools have brought about unimaginable convenience. Regarding such remarkable changes in humans' lifestyle, some people, including the author of the statement above, assert that the current effortless and luxurious lifestyle is more of a bane than a boon for people and prevent them from developing truly independent and strong personalities. Personally, I mostly agree with this notion and, in the following, I will explain my viewpoints toward this issue in detail.
To begin with, people do not face very serious challenges and difficulties in their current life due to numerous technological inventions and achievements. Until recently, people frequently encountered various problems and difficult situations required them to find a solution for or a way to deal with them. Endeavors to solve daily life problems and challenges simultaneously strengthened their personality and made them more independent and determined. However, current new technologies have obviated the necessity of addressing such difficulties. People can take long-distance trips in a remarkably short time using fast and inexpensive transportation means. Household chores are not a concern anymore for many people, who can take advantage of various electric appliances to do the necessary cleaning and cooking. Accessing online information resources such as online libraries and encyclopedias, scholars, as well as laypeople, can find answers to various questions and increase their knowledge and understanding. Thus, it is not necessary for many individuals to bother themselves with searching for solutions for mundane life issues and, in turn, decrease their attempts to enhance their determination and resourcefulness to overcome such difficulties.
Another equally important reason to hold this view is that luxurious and convenient life has made the current generation lazy. They are usually highly reluctant to change their conditions if they know that they may be deprived of their effortless and convenient life. Generally, convenience is highly addictive and many people get accustomed to it quickly. As a result, they mistakably forme this illusion that becoming successful and developing an independent and strong personality is also easy. However, the success still has the same old formula, which is setting a valuable goal, making considerable efforts and doing continuous hard work, and being committed and constant to pursue the path to fulfill the purpose. Hence, by encountering the first obstacle in their path, many people give up struggling and prefer to continue their same convenient ordinary life.
Even though in my view, technology and its subsequent convenient life result in some disadvantages for human beings. it admittedly has a major benefit, which is providing more free time for people. Many people usually devote this free time to entertaining activities. However, there are some people who exploit this time to work on themselves and improve their qualifications, capabilities, and in turn, their personalities and social position. Among these groups are women who has been able to promote their personal and social positions in society after substantial comfort came into their life with the advent of technologies. In the contemporary world, we see many women who are prime ministers, ministers, managers of giant corporations and social and political activists. Such women are those who are not bound with the responsibility of house works and child care anymore.
In conclusion, except for special groups of people who can take advantage of the merits of new technologies and their consequent conveniences, lavish and extremely effortless lifestyle prevents many individuals from becoming independent and successful by making them unwilling to experience real challenges and endeavors required for this purpose. In order to offset their negative effects, we should maintain a wise balance in applying technologies and making efforts to reach our valuable goals even if they seem too difficult to achieve.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 118, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...in some disadvantages for human beings. it admittedly has a major benefit, which i...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, then, thus, well, except for, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 43.0 14.8657303371 289% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3621.0 2235.4752809 162% => OK
No of words: 636.0 442.535393258 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69339622642 5.05705443957 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02185627292 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14624291623 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 341.0 215.323595506 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536163522013 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 1128.6 704.065955056 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0268758953 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.111111111 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5555555556 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07407407407 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177620181951 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467932473539 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360836414992 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10183932779 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03862730206 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 48.8420337079 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 12.1639044944 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 190.0 100.480337079 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 118, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...in some disadvantages for human beings. it admittedly has a major benefit, which i...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, then, thus, well, except for, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 43.0 14.8657303371 289% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3621.0 2235.4752809 162% => OK
No of words: 636.0 442.535393258 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69339622642 5.05705443957 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02185627292 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14624291623 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 341.0 215.323595506 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536163522013 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 1128.6 704.065955056 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0268758953 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.111111111 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5555555556 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07407407407 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177620181951 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467932473539 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360836414992 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10183932779 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03862730206 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 48.8420337079 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 12.1639044944 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 190.0 100.480337079 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.