People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position
Humans are very complicated creatures. Their characters and behaviors can be influenced by various factors, from the very external variables such as media to unknown and hidden internal factors such as their own attitudes, beliefs and thoughts. In the statement above, the author implies that people do not have considerable control over their different behaviors and they are actually under the influence of circumstances and forces. Personally, I mostly disagree with this notion and, in the following, I will explain my viewpoint toward this issue in detail.
To begin with, believing in this statement brings about into question the concept of "individual responsibility". If people's behaviors are inspired by different forces, they cannot be held responsible for their favorable and adverse actions because they can effortlessly claim that they were at the mercy of those forces when they were engaged in a specific situation. For instance, a murderer who killed his spouse or friend cannot be arrested or sentenced because he may assert that he was under the influence of extreme rage, jealousy or fear at that moment. A governor who endangered people's life and property by paying no attention to the victims of a natural disaster can easily attribute his negligence to being overwhelmed. In such situations, the prosecution, interrogation and punishment of culprits are actually useless and meaningless.
Another important reason to believe in this point of view is that acceptance of the power of forces and their roles in humans' behaviors, the process of achieving success loses its value and significance. Generally, in order to fulfil a goal and becoming successful, an individual has to set a valuable goal, make a detailed and calculated plan for himself, undergo a series of hard works, and remain committed and consistent to pursuing this path despite various kinds of obstacles that he may frequently encounter. This laborious process cannot be undertaken without intentional planning and deliberate endeavors. However, regarding the above position, people cannot carry out various tasks with their own volition, and thus, they are not able to take the necessary steps to reach a goal and become successful.
On the other hand, however, there are some circumstances in which people have not control of their minds and bodies. For instance, when they drink too much alcohol or use specific drugs or addictive substances, they become unconscious or, semi-conscious. Hence, they cannot think clearly and take actions thoughtfully. Except for these states, in my view, on all other occasions, people have complete control over their own actions and they should be held responsible for them.
To sum up, except for a few circumstances in which people have little control over their behaviors and actions, in other situations, they are absolutely responsible for not only their actions and reflections but their thoughts and decisions. Therefore, instead of making various excuses for our mistakes and weaknesses, we should make a serious attempt to enhance our personalities and promote our powers and skills to deal with arduous situations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, as to, except for, for instance, such as, in my view, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 14.8657303371 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2675.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 496.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39314516129 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00989023445 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556451612903 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 819.9 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.38483146067 342% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.7185723211 60.3974514979 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.789473684 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1052631579 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.89473684211 5.21951772744 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190383204926 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563625793242 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437744904937 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112546815698 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282321130946 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 100.480337079 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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