The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Life is a journey, that everyone has to go through. Each individual person has different ways and ethics in life, upon which they lead their life. It depends on how they perceive life or how they have experienced life so far. The prompt recommends that luxuries and convince of life mislead people from developing truly strong and independent individuals in both form morally and socially. In my opinion I strongly agree with the suggestion that luxuries and conveniences of life prevent people from being strong and independent for three reasons.
To begin, people, who born and brought up in luxury will find themselves into grave predicament in the near future. In other words, they may lack the ability to deal the future dilemmas in latter life. For instance, people, whose early childhood was filled with luxuries , they may find themselves very uncomfortable in normal life. Because of the unfamiliarities with the everyday’s dilemma, real life problems may consumed him/her completely. In other words, for him/her the the real life situations may seem unworldly. For instance, he may never had to wait for anything in his early life, then he/she may have lack of patience for everything in life. patience is an imperative element to prosper and sustain in life. Lacking one of the important factor of life may deter him from future success or being independent. They may have look the world in different point of views, where every thing is possible and you just have to ask. Luxury is the important factor of life, from being a strong and independent person psychologically or physically in both ways.
Furthermore, even if we assumed that despite being common people, leading luxurious life is not the authentic way to prosper in life. Too much luxury may cause the listlessness, which is the one of the main cause of weakness. Leading luxurious lifestyle may cause an individual grave problems in life. For instance, people who lead luxurious lifestyle may forget their place, in other words profligacy and listlessness will make him bankrupt or he may be lacking the ability to sustain life on his own. People with luxurious background may be dearth the ability to understand moral standards of life or the arrogance of the languid individual will bring baleful affects in future life. Another aspect that they may be too weak to deal psychological problems in life. Steadfast mentality is one the important element to prosper in life, otherwise the frugal mind will fail to concur the difficulties of life.
Of course, some argues that leading into luxurious life is the main goal for most of the people in present world. However, is not it the main criteria of possessing the necessary tools for being capable of leading luxurious life independently ?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, then, as to, for instance, of course, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2312.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 459.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03703703704 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74078928053 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466230936819 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5945313158 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3333333333 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232820709644 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082412275634 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654272349324 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169956229119 0.150359130593 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0807571279765 0.0667264976115 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.