The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Almost everyone in this world want luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life. Too much Luxurious life can hinder people from developing into strong indiviuals. In history, we have so many examples, people who lived in poverty and saw hardships of life, became better person, and made great contribution in science, politics etc.
Luxurious life can adversely effect students, as they have everything to lead a comfortable life, they might think, they don't need to do hardwork. Children of rich parents, who never get out of their comfort zone, never get chance to experience, how people without all those luxuries are living, and in case they need to live in poverty, they can't cop up with it, and there is a huge possibilty that they might go wrong direction to earn money or they might be just blaming luck and loosing all the chances which life is giving then to live a better life due to lack of hardwork.
Abraham Lincolon was a born and brought up in a poor family, but with hard work and passion, he became president of united states. Same if we look at history, we find many examples, people such as Dr. APJ Abdul Kalam, Brack Obama, who doens't get comfortable life, but due to their hardwork they make valueable contribution towards the welfare of soceity.
There is a other side of the issue also, people who are living a luxrious life might develop a strong personality, and work towards the betterment of society. Rich people have all the means, they can use those to develop their personality, and grow up as a strong indepedent personal. For example, Facebook CEO Mark Zackenbarg, he was having everything to lead a comfortable life, but he worked so hard on facebook, which is now one of the popular social meida site.
Thus, in conclusion, a luxrious life can lead to a dull life, and restrict people in their comfort zones, but if people conpromise their confort despite of all the luxries can become strong human beings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, then, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 337.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80415430267 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57011325233 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551928783383 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.6319443379 60.3974514979 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.181818182 118.986275619 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6363636364 23.4991977007 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165476787776 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810337246116 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557920787731 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102684264567 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518633461688 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.