Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.
Today internet and media have become an inherent part of our life to the extent that a major chunk of people cant imagine a day to pass by without having internet access. People will get stress out as they have mostly become dependent on internet for their daily entertainment , their knowledge expansion , food ,socializing and the list is just getting longer .
With such a plethora of varied information and options we have in each aspect we are looking for in internet, its not wrong to say we have platform where we can decide with multiple options whats really important and get our target information in much shorter time than it would have been with the traditional approach . We can get to know the information shared by person sitting at the other end of the planet or we can have instant discussion with the people sitting in any country (assuming having inyternet connectivity in each country).This has reduced our effort or time we would have given for understanding or getting our required information and prevented us from putting our focus on details which doesnt look useful for out target .
Along with the above benefits we are getting there is something we are getting affected negatively as well . Multiple options brings the distraction which doesnt allow us to focus on one or limited source of information or go deep into any few of them . We keep on changing things as and when we start getting some boredom or feel its getting somewhere you were not intending it to . So we just go for the next available resource to entertain us or make us pleased . Basically instead of coping with situations when things become a bit displeased we now go for a different option since we have the platform ready.
In concluding i would we do have varied options to make us more effective but we really need to be have good control to make a positive use for it , as it is making us less patient.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...od control to make a positive use for it , as it is making us less patient.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, really, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 334.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68862275449 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62463137075 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550898203593 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.3931400048 60.3974514979 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.6 118.986275619 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.4 23.4991977007 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 7.80617977528 256% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216457063301 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966797163183 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423421513976 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146737328602 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343201377869 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.1392134831 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 48.8420337079 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.