Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.
Some people see mass media and internet as boon that has enhanced their ability to arrange information according to their quality, while other say that although internet and mass media pose in front of us copious amount of information they make it impossible to choose quality from these profusion of information. In my opinion mass media and internet, although being very useful in accumulating raft of information of various topics, they do not enhance ability to find the crucial information from large quantities of information that mass media and internet offers. I believe this for two reasons.
To begin with, abundance of information makes it harder to stick to a particular point of view and thereby leading people to continuously vacillate from one information to another. Take an example of students who want to write an article on status of unemployment of USA. When these student go through various articles present in media then they will be simultaneously bombarded with several articles where in some of them overall positive outlook to unemployment is being conveyed and in others totally opposite outlook is being conveyed and these kind of situations are likely to result in students hopping from one chunk of information to other without reaching a conclusion. Getting pertinent and viable information is hard in these media outlets and thus rather than making it easier to sort information, most of the time is spend meandering from one piece of detail to other.
Additionally, lesser ability to focus on one brings with it another factors lack of skills to discern relevant information form irrelevant ones. When we keep jumping from one information to another , only superficial knowledge of subject matter is gained and a vague outlook which gives a feeling as if we have gained an abundance of knowledge begins to prevail within us. This false confidence sometimes in turn leads us to focus more on irrelevant information due to some unimportant reasons like interest on that area begins to stir up etc., and thereby leading us to totally divergent path and classifying information as important due to personal biases. Thus rather than choosing quality of information we get lost in quantity.
Some people might say that without these mediums people might never be able to get the amount of information that can be obtained withing few minutes, but still question remains same how to choose which information if correct and not just superflous? untill people are able to focus on few basic details that gets them fundamental understanding of what can be considered apt information these tool w
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ke it impossible to choose quality from these profusion of information. In my opinion mass medi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, still, then, thus, while, kind of, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2199.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 428.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13785046729 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83661051877 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542056074766 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.571091168 60.3974514979 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.153846154 118.986275619 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.9230769231 23.4991977007 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237118224568 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877612861148 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434300476798 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14351715389 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436655201932 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 14.1392134831 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.8420337079 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.