Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The statement states that mass media and internet have caused people's attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up to for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what's important. The given claim statement is marred by indiscriminate word choice which renders the sentiment expressed by it superficial. This statement is marginal, polemical and subjective in nature which reduces its efficacy and on grounds of pure logic and reason one cannot agree with the sentiment expressed by above statement.
To begin with the use of term people in above statement is polemical as it is a broad term that must be defined in the statement. This term is broad in the sense that each individual has it's own unique intellectual level and it cannot be expected from all people to sort through myriad of information from mass media and internet and choose what's best for their interest and term people include humans from all ages even school or kinder garden going students. We cannot expect student of such age to have that intellectual level enough to sort information and choose what's best for them for example school level student cannot learn topic such as machine learning own their own by searching on the internet and choose best course as internet contains myriad of information regarding machine learning and without guidance it would be a gigantic task for a student to sort best course to learn about machine learning. Thus statement should have specified the term people in above statement.
Above statement states that people are less able to focus on one thing but they more make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find's what's important. It can be argued that rather focusing on one thing and giving much attention to number of things would confuse most of people as they would not be able to concentrate on one thing which results in getting confused and incensed, it would further results into lack of determination for example, if a person wants to learn thermodynamics and searches for the information from internet and gets result about thermodynamics with other topics such as optics, quantum mechanics and starts reading them too instead of focusing on one topic, a person ended up reading myriad of topics that would lead to confusion and thus lose in determination. Thus it is better to focus on one thing rather on many things.
Above statement states that mass media and internet have caused people's attention spans to shorter and stating it as a positive effect instead of positive this kind of attitude leads to have detrimental effects. This kind of attitude in a person leads to lack of concentration and critical decision making of a person. Thus instead of having positive effect, it would have a negative effect on a person.
It can be concluded that by ignoring the critical factors which are essential for the assessment of the above statement in a comprehensive manner the issue becomes somewhat unilateral and subject to subjective generalization. On grounds of pure logic and reason one cannot agree with the above statement which suffers a great extent due to use of words that in themselves poorly defined and used in desultory manner.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 315, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...arge quantities of information and find whats important. The given claim statement is...
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Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...from mass media and internet and choose whats best for their interest and term people...
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Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...l enough to sort information and choose whats best for them for example school level ...
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Line 3, column 666, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to own'
Suggestion: to own
...ot learn topic such as machine learning own their own by searching on the internet ...
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Line 3, column 713, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'choose the best'.
Suggestion: choose the best
...ir own by searching on the internet and choose best course as internet contains myriad of i...
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Line 3, column 720, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to best', 'to well'
Suggestion: to best; to well
...by searching on the internet and choose best course as internet contains myriad of i...
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Line 3, column 868, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'sort the best'.
Suggestion: sort the best
...uld be a gigantic task for a student to sort best course to learn about machine learning....
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Line 3, column 918, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...course to learn about machine learning. Thus statement should have specified the ter...
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Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...rge quantities of information and finds whats important. It can be argued that rather...
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Line 5, column 312, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ntion to number of things would confuse most of people as they would not be able to concentrat...
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Line 5, column 446, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'result'
Suggestion: result
...confused and incensed, it would further results into lack of determination for example,...
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Line 5, column 838, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...nfusion and thus lose in determination. Thus it is better to focus on one thing rath...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld have a negative effect on a person. It can be concluded that by ignoring the...
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Line 9, column 121, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a comprehensive manner" with adverb for "comprehensive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...r the assessment of the above statement in a comprehensive manner the issue becomes somewhat unilateral a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, regarding, so, thus, while, for example, kind of, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 98.0 58.6224719101 167% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2811.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 566.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96643109541 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66067942419 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404593639576 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 886.5 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 148.115018124 60.3974514979 245% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 175.6875 118.986275619 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.375 23.4991977007 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414288915935 0.243740707755 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156038949907 0.0831039109588 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.163019020423 0.0758088955206 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234137812679 0.150359130593 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147892894582 0.0667264976115 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 14.1392134831 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 48.8420337079 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 12.1743820225 139% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.