A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal rec

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A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

The argument states that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay. To corroborate its claim the argument states it based on a recent study which indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care , while people in suburban areas in United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per week. The argument is unconvincing and polemical since it ignores alternate explanation which can possibly explain the situation presented in above argument.

The given argument has failed to consider alternate explanation of the situation mentioned above that is the variation in the food culture of Himalayan mountain region in Nepal and suburban areas in United States. This variation in the food culture of both region has different effects on the bodies of people living in both culture for example, it might be possible that food of suburban region in United States affect teeth more than the food of Himalayan mountain region in Nepal like candy which is more eaten in the United States than in Himalayan mountain region in Nepal results in tooth decay if eaten more. Therefore, variation in the food culture might be the reason as to greater number of tooth decay in United states.

Another explanation ignored by above statement is the difference of living lifestyle of people living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal and in suburban areas in the United States. Tooth Products used by the people in both region is also the main reason of variation in the number of tooth decay in both the region for example it might be possible that people in living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal use natural tooth products for cleaning the teeth while people in suburban areas in the United States use artificial products for cleaning the teeth which might not be as effective as the natural product used by people living in Himalayan region of Nepal. Thus variation in living lifestyle of people living in both region might be responsible as United States have more tooth decay.

Alternately, it can be argued that study presented in above argument might not be enough to corroborate the claim that children living in suburban areas in the United States have more tooth decay than children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal. Parameters used in the above mentioned study is not explained by the argument, failing to do so belies its claim. Parameters include sample size of children taken in the study, duration for which above study is done et cetera. Failing to provide such parameters invalidates the claim done in above argument.

The argument given above could have greatly enhanced if perusal of its underlying assumption had taken place. By failing to acknowledge the alternative explanation that can help the explain the situation mentioned in above argument is open to charge of hasty conclusion. The given explanation must be viewed in the light of these alternate explanation for the comprehensive analysis of the situation mentioned in above argument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 98.0 55.5748502994 176% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2711.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 535.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06728971963 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57157982683 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.317757009346 0.468620217663 68% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 883.8 705.55239521 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 128.626154028 57.8364921388 222% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 169.4375 119.503703932 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.4375 23.324526521 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.541921098219 0.218282227539 248% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192933064237 0.0743258471296 260% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.209681499631 0.0701772020484 299% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328315844833 0.128457276422 256% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.179134091068 0.0628817314937 285% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 14.3799401198 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 48.3550499002 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.197005988 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 535 350
No. of Characters: 2672 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.809 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.994 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.537 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 209 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.438 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.926 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.438 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.666 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.233 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5